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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Aug 19, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

AN INADEQUATE EXCHANGE

 

In for repairs... :)
Thanks Cat!
— Bonitaj, Aug 19, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Boni ...

This for me is your best so far :) ... the dam wall is going to break and it has and a part of me seeps from it still… Loved this one and these words are what give it its strength for me ... wonderful write ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks so much Jayne!

You of the "morphing image!" (new pic every other day! - Keep 'em guessing is what I say! lol) Delighted that you liked this piece as I had SERIOUS reservations about posting it! It is more of an 'informative' description than a poem - except for the last lines which I also liked btw.! Thanks for stopping by! Will get to your stuff soon... albeit quite a bit I've missed! Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

LOL Morphing Image

I get bored ... what can I say .. And if you have any others like this one you have reservations about ... submit ... I find when I have doubts they usually are the ones that work ... don"t ask me why ??? it just is lol ... Love and hugz Jayne ... "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Boni

Almost a rant, but necessary sometimes. I personally know someone like this, my sister. She raised a brat that still lives with her at age 25. The brat won't help with any of the work, but has plenty of demands. But really it is my sister's fault, because she raised said brat to be this way. She spoiled her rotten. I like the end lines, but I also can really relate to these lines: when we give - without ever getting or even expecting anything in return resentment’s rot sets in I think the poem needs just a bit of polishing. not much, just a little. Always, Cat