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Seren
Seren
Aug 18, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Kicking and Screaming

The freedom of
illusion

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Light slivers to
nothing,
looking back
for comfort,
fearful and knowing,
eyes bending
I'm compelled to move,
yet,
With knowledge and
barriers let down
bare to the world,
cringing,
I step forward

Each movement
A searing lesson
in pain and torment,
suffering in the wear,
but still
endured

A rays first
touch
torching cobwebs
shame spun
the second dusted
mistakes layered
each sashay forward
leaping in time
pealing layers
of camouflage,
in daylight
stripped,
of shadows hold,
deluded
in Illusion

------

In that place
shadow at heel,
consuming all,
he waits,
holding fibrils
of identity,
tethering to life
ready to draw me home,
kicking and screaming 

— Seren, Aug 18, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jayne

This part seems to be about Death personified: In that place shadow at heel, consuming all, he waits, holding fibrils of identity, tethering to life ready to draw me home, kicking and screaming While the rest of the poem seems to be about out distancing Death and keeping dignity and humanity. I like these lines: A rays first touch torching cobwebs shame spun the second dusted mistakes layered each sashay forward leaping in time pealing layers of camouflage, in daylight stripped, of shadows hold, deluded in Illusion Very powerful write, Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Cat ..

Your spot on it is about death .. and I did personify him , for me anyway, and it was another write, stepping into unknowns and finding something different , again, I am so happy you liked it Cat but then I am always happy when you like them ... I can go to bed with a smile now :).. big hugz of love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

THANATOS!

"Wherefore art thou!~??" Whew! You go places angels fear to tread! I know I certainly do! SPlendid write. My favourite lines: "In that place shadow at heel, consuming all, he waits, holding fibrils of identity, tethering to life ready to draw me home, kicking and screaming"
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Boni

Thanato's ??? ... dont know if I know what that meens... lol ... but I am glad you liked it ... Regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 9 months ago

hi...

I really like this write of your it does seem to take a different direction then when I first read some of your things but I like this new direction ur words are deep and full of meaning I can feel the presence dark and looming. -diatom shells
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

I have no direction

I just flow werever thought takes me, and as I get more comfortable ? I move it up a notch , its the only way I know, to improve, when to stop taking it up a notch?, theres the real question ... thanks for your comment and read much appreciated ... regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 9 months ago

well..

yes you definitely are taking it up a notch and I like how you think. -diatom shells
S

sweetspirit

16 years 9 months ago

Darkly Delicious

I am a fan of darker writings to begin with :))) I like the others love the one set of verse: “In that place shadow at heel, consuming all, he waits, holding fibrils of identity, tethering to life ready to draw me home, kicking and screaming” I agree with Cat they do personify Death his purpose. Wonderful write hun..they just get better and better each time I read. Jen
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dearest Jen

Thank you first off for your wonderful comment, I am grateful people like this one , I never know what will resonate with people ... I think this ones a womans poem lol no men have commented that says it all ... Those words you picked out ? are some of my favourites ... so glad you found this one and I am always grateful for your thoughts my friend ... love and hugz Jayne "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Cassie,

I am awed by your comment,I dont know that this is great but it is just one view of death,I am trying new stuff out all the time seeing where I can go , what my mind will allow I guess and this came out in a flow .. this is my first new write for a while ... and I am surprised again ... people liked it lol I always am ... thank you so much for your comment it is much appreciated ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Oh Seren, i find this

Oh Seren, i find this difficult to understand, its logic slips my brain's understanding perhaps it is me who I too thick to correlate the meanings, I don't know. "Light slivers to........(slices of light are they?)
 nothing,
looking back.............(is the light looking back?) 
for comfort,
 fearful and knowing,
 eyes bending"............(bending?I don't quite understand the logic here.) "the second dusted"......(what is the second?) "With knowledge and"........(do you need and?) "A rays first 
touch
torching cobwebs 
shame spun......................(I like this bit)
 the second dusted 
mistakes layered
 each sashay forward............(or chassée?)
 leaping in time" "holding fibrils.......(not sure of the meaning here?)
 of identity, 
tethering to life......................(these three lines seem a little obscure to me?)
 ready to draw me home, 
kicking and screaming " Now you are kicking and screaming and you of all people I wouldn't like to offend, its just me not getting the connections, so don't worry if you are not interested in this comment, I won't be offended!! Lve from Ann of Norway.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ann

It takes alot to offend me and I am certainly not offended at your comment my friend ... you know your a very clever woman ... you have made me rethink my harsh edit ... there were other lines to this that I chopped off , that would tie it all together for you, and those lines you've pointed out well they were lines that had other lines with them ... will send you the full poem with the chops and you can decided if it makes more sense to you , I certainly dont want people confused and wondering at connections between lines , I am at loose ends today will have a look and see if I cant improve this one ... Much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...