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mantiscepter
Aug 17, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Penetration

Minds ; that bend impervious fields,

of mere intentions, I'd never yield.

a force of power : to choose; I reach.

a structure of meaning, my soul does breach.


— mantiscepter, Aug 17, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

WOW … thats deep Mantis

WOW ... thats deep Mantis ... a structure of meaning my soul does breach ... lovely little write again I enjoyed it my friend ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

Title change::

Thanx Jayne xx for your time and critic. tis good to know your out there in a Magical dimension dropping fairy dust on all who enter the Realm. ( ha ha ha ! )
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 9 months ago

And....

...it's true. I truly appreciated the logic AND the brevity of this piece. I recently tried something similiar with my, "Fool Circle". Although, I'm being coerced by a, "force of power:to choose;"...yours, over my effort. Thank you for posting this. It rang true...as it spoke to me. "write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}8==== docmaverick.
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

penetration:

Nice to hear from you Docmaverick, its always nice to see a new comment. So glad you liked it. I noticed this morning I had placed the wrong title on the writing; oh well , ( to change or not to change?) that is the ? ; Hope to hear from you again. Mantiscepter