Decoded in the Unknown

I adore this one..the flow is so smooth and inviting your at the end before you know an reading once more.. From life to the next we never forget from where it is we came or the loves from each and once we have a surreal connection to one no matter the time or space we always sense and seek it out. Jen

This is a more serious poem. It dispenses with the flowery fantasy. One might call that gilding your comfort. This poem is to your beloved. Telling of the value of the beloved. It is therefore a potential and important keepsake. I am not sure I could write poetry if I was in need of great comfort. For I find poetry comforting after the fact. During, it is stressful and the more so when it is about difficult stuff and is being reveled to the world. I hate abandonment but mostly write what risks offense in one fashion or another, to my heart or to others. Here you sacrifice for the poem, and yet only half way, staying to comfortable metaphors, still worried about acceptance too, even now. And half of me agrees; how can one delve into old hatreds, fears, scream your need, while trying to keep balance during traumatic events. Half of me disagrees, encouraging the pushing on, endure the unendurable to make near incomprehensible beauty. And, in my head, I say, don't listen to him, it will hurt too much. And in my head, I say, its how not to give in, its how to touch your greatness, its how." And I am ashamed to be right about both, to be the tempter and, either way, risk the wrath of a friend in pain. Brian

this floated by such an airy feel to it. I loved this piece, If by some unknown we fail in rediscovery a dream carrying grace and flowered in life blooms eternally, everyone is of the same ingredients I always say. -diatom shells

i love it...just as i adore all ur work...ur talent never ceases to amaze me tho with that i have to say its beautifully written n sounds great.. tho for the poor bastard with lesser intelligence like myself i dont actually understand it but never the less i did enjoy readin it :)....as half asleep as i am haha love ya mum

These lines: Tendrils of shared thought travel infinite unknowns send vibrations through my soul. You have achieved the intangible in this poem. T S Elliot says: "Poetry should communicate before it is understood". This is what this poem does. Great write Jaye. Your friend always ... Leonard —-

Yes it is different for you a fascade of your minds work that I hope to see more of. I particularly love In the flowing now, bask, to the following, breathless and unknowing, I accept the grace of time and tide, floating the eddy’s this I can identify with as I can with so much of what you write. I think there are wavelengths of thought and the where and when doesn't matter it is the now that is the living and the feeling.... Thanks Jayne this is a read to ponder on and come back to. Liz

This is such a lovely write. It flows like a dainty stream. I'll bet your hubby was over- taken with pride and joy when you read it to him. my favorite lines are: This will carry through all eve-rs and afters, as one. For we were never parted, always in unity of each other latticed together These lines appease my deep seated fears of abandonment. Congratulations on making the spotlight! Love, Cat

Oh such love, such is love, no time barrier, no space barrier, pure essence of reality in ones heart beat a red flow of life's colours, flames leap high here but not fiery passionate flames, those gentle intensely delicate meaningful flames that lick our well of existence so deeply, that its taste even reaches ours, and doing so intoxicates our minds for the moment of reading your poem Seren-e! "Here you sacrifice for the poem" As Brian and Olya say you sacrifice yourself and in doing so have found a thread with which to weave such a lovely poem for us, we are blessed to hear its treasured gift, its hidden love, its beautiful cadences as it flows like a special music through our, other, outer minds and reaches to our inner minds with such feeling and certainty. I enjoyed this very much, and you with children, how well you concentrate, I admire that. With love from Ann of Norway ______________ its a little like this rough of mine but mine is not so good- needs working on :- "Sweet poison" Oh sweet poison that is life's knife cuts deep into the flesh deep into the heart of us deep so deep so deep And there bloom flowers of love of ecsatasy of orgasmic power taking over our presence taking over our essence leaving us without lost uninhabited a husk the shell of hollow sound rolls round and round the hearts gong rung out  round and meets again  the poison pen  that writes its blood black letters once again thwarted disgusted we stagger on and meet the door once more  until perchance  some happy day  we enter  we adore we search no more the poison is now wine divine and pure the white of virgin snow the fire of roses red bleeding drops of scarlet dripping life's love generous and free unconditioned simplified pure joy if we are lucky if we don't strive too hard if we are receptive of the gentle meaningful caresses that read tomes  of silent poems to our conscious minds and no longer blind  we dance in love's great ball  we dine we sway we fall in love's sweet hall enthralled  and home for ever more

Very different for you, Seren. But, I like the almost uneasy tone throughout. It underscores your trepidation in posting it. Not sure of the essence of presence line the way it is written but love those two words together. L&Hugz, Gee.

Guess it was just the way I was feeling when I read it. I wasn't in the best of moods. After reading your puzzlement at my comments went back to read with fresh eyes and a little sleep and saw that I was all wrong. Sorry if I made you think it wasn't right. Life has been pretty difficult lately, maybe I should take a break from commenting, and just write until I get feeling better. I will keep reading your work though. Snake is one lucky man, and you so lucky to have such a relationship to write about. L & Hugz, Gee

Snake in the weeping willow. It sounds like a good title. Maybe I'll use that, if I may? LOL I am also very lucky to have such good friends. It is easy for me to follow my heart, with such affirmation from them. I am smiling! I have just finished my latest, and think it pretty good if I do say so myself....[ We both agree]. LOL, I will leave you to figure out that cryptic comment. L & Hugz, Gee. P.S. You will have a big clue tomorrow night, when I post my newie.

Hmmmmmmmmmm.... I might be able to work that in too. And I hope that becoming more clearly myself, is possible. L & Hugz, Gee

What about the THOUSANDS of cobra's from Burma in the Florida Everglades ooo ooo ooo!!! A little off the subject but "tant pis!" Ann

=So much the worse - too bad - or for me it also means - amen or so be it - che sera sera- so what - is perhaps the meaning I really have in my mind. Ah well, tant pis! What fun with a snake, how does it show its feelings I wonder are there lights in it eye that give the essenc of it? I would be able to get usd to one if you were there to show him to me; I think? Love Ann of Norway