Ashes to Ashes

was good for me ,nice tempo good word use. Interesting write...A Beauty. Mantiscepter

As usual a beautiful piece well crafted and spell binding a slightly diferent write to mine, I was wondering if to keep the flow in verse six that the last word could be Part (dirt caged in past) being part of the whole as it were and keeping that lovely flow. I may try to write such pieces and see how they turn out, as the nearest I have been is my two Dragon ones from a while back. It is great to be able to seek and find the Mythical side of legends and things then turn them into a piece such as this, Yours Ian.T

Everytime I read something of yours, I travel to places I've forgotten. You must have a pipeline straight to my memories. So that's where they go! LOL You are diverting my mind! LOL I went to a Renaissance Fair once, and your poem took me straight back there! I love it! L & Hugz, Gee

jayne My friend you just blow me away what can I say. This is awesome - haunting...... The more I read you transport me to a different land of myths and legend but still of today For me my knight armour dented here and there is still for me the only knight yearned for black heart has melted by me i believe but as times of bold is he to his lady fair - but his lady fair so lonesome be without her knight beside her shine Demon loves the blue angel true blue angel loves her demon too but waits for the magic again to fulfill black heart to melt like chocolate and flow with the wine of desire Fire flames ashes be like the phoenix risen again and again to consume its lust only to die only ashes remain my fire ignites black heart so Magic myths legends cast their spell as I await for the spell to be cast ever waiting for the tinks magic wand to send the glittering shower upon us like the gentle rain from above to light up the hearts so to desire again true love ways For me the four elements Earth wind fire water seams to be the force that binds us Blue so Blue

Jayne Thank you my friend for your comments As for me I do not know what keeps my faith in the unknown but it does sometimes waiver but becomes strong again - why - dented or not that is where i belong My innerlight ignites where i think of my dented knight always blue

The cosmic mother is an identity all women share... you have waxed and waned of it beautifully....poetically.... ~A "If you have come to help me, you are wasting your time. But if you have come because your liberation is wound up in mine, then let us work together." Aboriginal Activist Group, Queensland, 1970's

I tried to comment on this last night but my computer was acting up.I love this poem so much. It is beautiful beyond words, im speachless to tell you the truth. Love, Greeneyes

top stuff sorry i cant think of much else to say my brain is dead weight 3 day bender always turns ur skull to mush i know u know wat im talkin bout <3

I keep forgetting Da Stars... Da Stars... Herve...(shades of Fantastic Island) ~A "If you have come to help me, you are wasting your time. But if you have come because your liberation is wound up in mine, then let us work together." Aboriginal Activist Group, Queensland, 1970's

Amazing how one's subconcsious brings forth memories from another life some recognize it as being so others call it creativity. I personally am mezmorized by this writing in more ways than one..is very similar to one I am working on now that I hope to post soon still working out a few kinks then the dreaded title..that part I hate.. No swine for a feast No wine for us to drink No gentle breezes for us breathe No thoughts drifting on memories of yesterday Crossed paths a time or two I think We did indeed and not so long ago Though each reflection was different Our souls did pass-we did not know. On this plain of man We met for a brief moment Our sins forgiven from the distant past Our reservations were truly heaven sent. From this life to another we shall go Forging on with uncertainty On judgment day we shall find ~Our Souls~ are bonded through all eternity. ~SweetSpirit~

You have a beauty here Jayne. My only problem with this is the word "did" in "did rescind" [line 30] and "did rest" [line 40] this could be me, just didn't seem to flow well at these spots. Other that that, like I said a very nice piece! ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

I enjoyed this lovely piece Jayne. It has a lovely flow and great imagery but I stumbled on the verse A Flaming phoenix,re-birthed no more A splendor embers to ash on the floor I think it is the use of A splendor embers..the A seems singular but the whole lines seems plural...am I just getting the play of words wrong or missing a hidden meaning? Sorry but I stumble on this each time I read it and I am not really sure why. Best Wishes Liz

This work requires no solicitation. I could tell from the start I should tuck myself deep into a soft reading chair, bag of popcorn lightly buttered and an uncluttered mind to expend my undivided attention to these splendid series of lines which by themselves is monumental. Free of charge, you have offered us your finest leaf...pressed and rolled, we inhale your hallucinogens. ...you should be writing with Peter Jackson. Nicely done PINT :)