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Seren
Seren
Aug 12, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Grinning Moons

Take me in your arms
don't caress in charm,
hold me

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Two mirrored bands
unclenched they fan,
sweating balm

A brush of sight
to delicious delight,
to shivers

Laced breath in fits
Tongues curl to spit,
warm rivers

Torqued need ignites
Fervor flaming bright,
touched light

Falling floats of lust
needs met in trust,
well sated

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Floated to the moon
grinning like a loon,
I'm at peace

— Seren, Aug 12, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I was very taken with this lightly sensual piece. I'm glad to see you writing again. Your muse seems to be in a carefree mood today. I really like the beginning and end to this poem. Always, Cat
O

orgami

16 years 10 months ago

like the subtle dazzle

flow is sedate and leisure the heady revelation Im loving the words and poem!!
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Steven !!! LOL

Must be getting late there hun , I was just answering Cat and your message was there when I posted , so happy you like this one its just a bit of fun I wrote a while back ... Glad you liked it friend and good too see you love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Cat

I wrote this one, a little while ago but it was just for fun LOL and I am glad you liked it, different from my normal fare , My muse is still on holiday but thats ok I am right for about 3 months , just hope she comes back soon I am beginning to think Ive been abandoned .... lol but its ok I have a few poems up my sleeve to work on ... hope your feeling better and its not too hot there hun !!! sounds like you guys are going to have a scorcher there today and its a beautiful sunny day here as well wooooootoooot I love the sun lol ... love & hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Grinning Moons

Some fun! Was sedate, Hell! I trotted right along with the pace,and it was good! Nice job, Seren. ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Gee

I am glad you liked it hun just got home from having some tests done will be back round later, am a little tired hope your well ... take care love & hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Grinning Moons

Hope things are O.K. I am as well as can be expected, as a matter of fact, I don't ask for more than being able to get up and going these days. I went with my two best friends last night to meet one's brother, whom he had not seen in seven years before last week. They were all kids together. Had a really good time didn't get home until after midnight. Get some rest, and will see you when you get up and going. L & Hugz, Gee. P.S. You sound as lucky as I in matters of the heart, that is something we both can take comfort in.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Gee

I am doing better tonight , feeling better thanks for asking hun ,and I am glad your doing better and its sounds like you had a good night with the boys , and we are both lucky and I am thankful for that everyday ... much love & hugs Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

You write

some of the sweetest sensual poetry. Light yet not frivolous! Keep up the sensual stuff Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Boni

I credit my poetry and the sensual stuff to the other half , hes just that sort of man ;) ... he could charm the angels off their perches but I love him the way he is ... honest , caring , tough when needs be , sensitive in ways I cannot begin to describe ... and yes every single one of these are dedicated to him hes my inspiration ... Stoked you liked this one , and I love the passion in your new one just finished reading it to be honest ... take care love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

loons

very lithe warming, touched rhymes in mind; love unveiled . as always. Mantiscepter
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Mantiscepter ...

this one was a little bit of fun .. LOL.. *Big smile* and glad you liked it, wasnt sure whether to submit this one lol , will be around later tonight will see if you have anything new .. take care till next time my friend ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
yenti

yenti

16 years 9 months ago

Young Jayne

Here the sensual took over for a while and floated you off some place.Very lovely to read, as it shows another facet to your feelings, there was one word that I am not sure of (picky Picky Me) (Torqued need ignites) To torque is to tighten up to a certain pressure or a turning power of some description. Did you mean Torched As in ignited or burnt. It's my age little one I am getting to be a Picky Ole fella. You take care of all that are with you, and You, Yours Ian.T
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Ian

I was just about to go to bed and noticed your comment , Sooo Happy you got the floating away feeling thats what I was going for I just read your reply to me on your poem , and yes that's the next level I was aiming to go for next , you see I tried at first to go to far too fast so I have gone up levels as I become comfortable I take it up a notch , so thats my next project might take a week but I aim to write one as you suggested ... fingers crossed I am up to it LOL And the torqued need ignites is meant to be torqued lol yes I know that was a little naughty of me *big Smile* , and I hope your in wellness love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
B

bjp

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

I read a number of your recent poems to Olya this morning. Some are like drum beats: sad sound waves from skin. There, you write in a sugar coated code, one supposes for other's protection. This poem is more direct. It speaks of the need to be loved, both un-lustfully and lustfully, as a person and as a woman. There are some great turns of phrase. I especially like, "Laced breath in fits/ Tongues curl to spit,/warm rivers". It is interesting that spit is "gross" in most contexts of life but in intimacy, it is a necessary artifact, delicious in its ripeness, slippery and swallowable to our comfort. It is a perfection of social paradox, and you name it so well. Brian
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Brian

Sad sound waves from skin ... I love that it sounds not unpleasant .. maybe the radiation of sadness weeping in word, to bleed the spirit But your right I do write in a sugar coated way and its not to protect others but it's actually myself that resists memory, and shy's away from the pain, This one does speak of a need to me loved we all feel that need , not that I dont feel loved , I Do, my family and friends make sure I know I had a little laugh that you liked those lines because it was something you and Olya had said on another poem that made me think of that , so in essense the credit is partly yours, and spit is gross but in the throws of love , it becomes a nectar of love ... and thats the image I was trying to portray ... thank you both for the read and the comment I am glad you both liked this one ... Love & hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
doorman

doorman

16 years 9 months ago

Seren

Browsing through your stuff. I love the sheer power in this poem. ''Laced breath in fits Tongues curl to spit, warm rivers'' Now, that's a line! Yours, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Espen ... Browse away lol

Those lines you picked are some of my favourite lines in this one ... Yours sincerely Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Did it again

You are going to have to write some more of this, touches the heartstrings.And apparently it is something some readers have not seen in you. Well, I think your capable of anything. Like me, you seem strong willed, not afraid to say, love change and what more can I say. Even though I like The Magical prose of Dragons and the gay tendencies of your beloved little gnome under the mushy, I do have a strong liking to this one.Spiritual,raunchy, which is beautiful. Love Lyz.x
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

LOL Dear Lyz ..

I roared laughing at the gay tendenancies of my gnome .... omg I have thought something truely wicked lmao ... You planeted this seed ... serendipity wont leave me alone , my muse shes a relentless bitch sometimes I was trying to sleep but this poem, first stanza, keep running though my head and now I am wide awake its 3.30am lol .. love and hugz Jayne ... Loved your new one hun its brilliant.. We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...