Desperation's are Only Weapons has been selected for publication @ wikinut.com

Desperation's are Only Weapons
Has been selected for publication @ wikinut.com

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by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Aug 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

hello

The language usage was pretty good, as was the pacing. I always enjoy poetry based on relationships, perhaps because it makes me feel a bit of a voyeur. I think it needs a bit of polishing. These were my favorite lines: I so remember watching you disrobe For the first time uninhibited by Shame or concern (the "of what not" kind of threw me off) Always, Cat

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 10 months ago

Hello Cat I was not going to put in there

But, Darn it it stuck to me like glue. Sometimes I can't force myself to eliminate right away and I believe it must go but, I have not come to terms with letting it go just yet, if that makes any sense. Thanks for the coment they are muched apperciated Donnie/Sinbad

Diatom Shells

16 years 10 months ago

....

this starts out so sweet and then it is so sad I know exactly the feeling in this poem and it made me shed. -diatom shells

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 10 months ago

Sorry to bring tears or fears But, I enjoy seeing feelings

Induced or inspire they let me know I am not alone in this world which for so long I have felt deeply that I was. I am loner, I am A lone, I was alone I wish not to be. True forgiveness requires an erasure of the offense, which most can not do even for themselves, It is easy to forgive and hard to forget but, don't they coincide to forgive fully it needs to be blotted out or it is not forgiven or so I was trying to show Donnie/Sinbad thank you for the read an the comment

Diatom Shells

16 years 10 months ago

yes

you ar so right. it should be blotted out I like that. I am not alone but I feel as such sometimes especially when my mother passed I felt very alone. thanks for your words they are comforting -diatom shells p.s. I like your pic I am having troubles posting one lol