Seren

Aug 11, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Heart in Rivers

Distorted are the waves
trembling here I find
in words a softness felt
staining tears smear time

Voids did echo vast
regrets of shadow fell
and serendipity blessed
to pause this living hell

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A sliver of light
kissed the dark
and misery allowed
this glow to pass

Lightning night
flown into calm
a missive was sent
from loving arms

In gestured kind
was sent a truth
a withered seed
found ground to root

Four chambers filled
and burst apart
love recovered
this broken heart

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Splendour in the moments
that mend a bleeding part
tender are the feelings
feeding to black-heart

Surrealist in the mist
floating salty dreams
thankful of this blessing
A river crying streams

— Seren, Aug 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Jayne

These lines really resonate in me: Voids did echo vast regrets of shadow fell and serendipity blessed to pause this living hell But these lines are my favorite because they are so hopeful: Splendour in the moments that mend a bleeding part tender are the feelings feeding to black-heart Surrealist in the mist floating salty dreams thankful of this blessing A river crying streams a really beautiful and meaningful write. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dearest Cat

I received a note from friends the other day, I cant begin to describe how touched I was by it , it came at a time I needed a bit of a lift , well this was my reply to them I just didnt have to words to thank them soooo this was the only way I could think of to show my appreciation ... so glad you liked it my friend your opinion meens the world to me ... all my love (hug) Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

believe

16 years 10 months ago

Enthrawling poem

this poem makes one thing on second read it comes clearer, clever my favorite bit: In gestured kind was sent a truth a withered seed found ground to root Great stuff !!! RAy

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ray

Glad you liked my poem its a more private one this one but its always nice to know when people get something out of a read ... thank you for your comment and I am humbled that you think that its great I wasnt sure whether to submit it lol I wasnt sure it was ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Tis I again...

To stand in line and pay homage!! Liked so many descriptive images particularly this one: Voids did echo vast regrets of shadow fell and serendipity blessed to pause this living hell as ever - your light shines through! Thank you Jayne Bonita j

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Boni

Sure that line your following aint the dinner line ? LOL seems that they are always asking me at home whats for dinner ... But jokes aside, this one was a responce to a touching message I received , sometimes I do get overwhelemed and have to find my answer in music or words , this one felt its answer in words ... So glad you liked it .. love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Electric Blue

16 years 9 months ago

A heart In Rivers

Jayne So many words here are me truely waves always between us - serendipitey is a favourite word for me - living hell seems the for me to be Silver light kissed the dark as it strikes my broken heart splender in a few moments do I find but can this bleeding heart ever be mended by the black heart Always in the mist am I my tears fill the rivers and streams Such a beautiful tribute to your friend Always my friend Blue so blue

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Maggie

A river crying blue streams, my friend ... your words and verses always touch my heart I am so glad you found this one and liked it ... I had been having a couple of bad days last week and a note changed my mind set and gave me a lift I sorely needed , they like you, are my friends and always touch me with their words of support and love , I am truely blessed Maggie ((((hug)))) am feeling a bit better tonight will be round later and will PM you .. Love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Seren

What can I say? Gimme more. Lyz.x

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Lyz

LOL I will endeavor to write more of these ones, this one was inspired by kind words from friends far across the sea and i just wanted them to know without hullaballo that I appreciate them and their friendship .. much love and hugz Jayne x x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...