BEYOND ILLUSIONS

BEYOND ILLUSIONS

Aching abatesdreams diffusedesire becomes decompressed -souls no longer fused. Fate's silent surprise spells Love's dastardly demise -the wheel of time turns broken hearts are rolled aside. From the jaws of regretmemories are appriseda slipping into insignificance -the consequence of time The affair is over....
mourned with cries and whimpers
lovers are wiser,
life becomes empty - just simplier.

BjR 10 August, '09

— Bonitaj, Aug 10, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

PARTING SHOTS

Hi Boni, Good capture of the melancholic low that burns the insides after a loss. Had problems finding out the meaning of ''dastedly'' (dastardly?). ''It is better to have loved and lost than never to have lost at all.'' - Samuel Butler All the best, Espen.

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks for the spellcheck!

and the comments Espen! Always good to have you standing by! Boni

bjp

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Bonita,

There is decompression here. There are pits in the page and a sag in the shoulders. It certainly evokes the feelings it speaks to. I certainly like the subject better when you are in more song. Brian

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

THanks Brian

what succeeds decompression but a dumbing down of senses? Nothing extirpates drive like boredom...Oh slumber - where is thou dream? Gone such a muse, when come another/... BjR

Michael Anthony

16 years 9 months ago

Really felt the dissapation

of the soul of loves lost in this one Bonni! Tapping the dark to come to the light. Favorite lines: From the jaws of regret memories are apprized (apprised?) a slipping into insignificance - the consequence of time Rock solid write B! Best Mike

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

thanks Mike!

You gentlemen really put me to shame on my spelling this time. "More haste, less speed!" Thanks for your generous assessment too! Boni

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Boni this ones well writen

Boni this ones well writen and its dragging so it is doing its job ... I have to say after the read I felt listless, not a feeling I like , LOL .. still a good write but like Brian I like you more in tune with the world and bursting at the seams (hug) love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Bonitaj

16 years 9 months ago

AH Jayne!

Isn't that just the feeling when the "illusions" are gone and there are no dreams left!? Yes! Indeed a heavy tone to go with the subject - thanks so much for stopping by... always appreciate your thoughts on these matters! :) Take care Boni