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Invisible me;

Walking in a room,
no one looks by.
Walking in a room,
it's like everyone is blind.
I can do cartwheels,
and yell so loud,
but in the end,
I'm just the invisible clown.

 

I can poke and kick,
but no one clicks.
Like their mind is plain blocked,
from my sound and thoughts.
All alone in my own little world,
but surrounded by some,
who wont even talk,
in my invisible world.

— ANC1996, Aug 10, 2009

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Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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Kenneth Sharp

16 years 10 months ago

Nice work

Seems like a quiet plea to yearn to be 'taken seriously'. I felt the first stanza flowed nicely and resonated a bit more than the second because of that. I'm not sure how, but if you managed to capture that same rhythm for the second stanza, your piece would have a lot more polish to it.
ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

:)

Im quite taken seriously now :) Lol didnt used to be,, But thnks for your sggestion, i kinda thougtht the second wasnt right somehow... Thanks for your help :) Peace Out- A.Nicole :)