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Heavens Tears

 Hands free - no hands to hold  hair full of rain I look up atthe sky my falling tearsmerge with heavensrainfall I dream of love - hair drippingwet face showered by myfalling tears – blue eyeshaunt me watchingthem My heart leaping at the thought ofyou - I see my reflection in thewindows I pass by – but itis always just me - aloneforever no one there -to share But your shadow appears as aghost in the reflection - likean echo fading into thefar distance







Electric blue so blue
— Electric Blue, Aug 09, 2009

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Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

16 years 10 months ago

Blue On Blue

Heart ache on heart ache A song we share or sing together lovely write Electric Donnie/Sinbad
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 10 months ago

Heavens Tears

Donnie Thank you my friend Yes me so lonesome blue just another day sitting alone wishing and hoping longing to be where i want to be with whom i want to be with But all i can do is dream dreams longing for my soulmate to come though time is slipping by so quickly it is running out Blue so Blue
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orgami

16 years 10 months ago

something a little different

I feel there is more elaboration in this poem more articulate meaning with pace nothing too lavish and yet not too lenient to keep me quessing it switched flow midway and become interesting I like the use of ghost and echo its creatively visual in a thoughtful manner I feel its something a little different then your usual and I like it
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 9 months ago

Heavens Tears

Org This is about my heartache longing for love for existence. to have someone to share to walk and talk with as others do As i sit in the rain i observe the elements around me being so alone solitary sitting there like waiting for the tram or train that will never ever come seconds turn into hours the rain increases hard and fast like the tears i have shed my emotions tugged at my heart again............ But again as i walk passed shop windows the refelections i see is just me - alone but ghosts appear i see the face of the one i long to see for an instant is is as clear as day then when i try to look further it fades slowly away into the darkness disappearing like drowning back down into the oceans deep and dark - did i imagine this? did i really see? or was it just my heart playing tricks on me?........................................ But back to the reality it is just me - people pass by the noise is deafening there they are the great public going about their business and me in a different dimension. The people they rush by walking talkng screaming shouting laughing all a buzz but there am i in the darkness in the shadows unseen but maybe I am just a blur............ Just my soul calling out to my soulmate and he appears but he is always there in my head my heart and soul............... Just me rambling on always longing to be loved....to give me a reason to exist! Blue so lonesome blue
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ConcreteRose

16 years 10 months ago

You have a talent

I am in awe. So much emotion in this beautifully written poem of longing, I'll be checking out more of your work.
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 10 months ago

Heavens Tears

C R I will reply later just off to work. Crying in the rain is the best as no one can see the heartache inside of me just longing to be loved Electric blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Maggie

... Blue tears falling, this ones poignant but its also like a steady drip of that blue rain followed us all through the poem ... your longing and the effigy in the window is heartfelt ... dripped in blue teared sadness but still beautiful thoughts my friend hope your well much love and hugz Jayne x x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 9 months ago

Heavens Tears

Jayne Thank you my friend for looking in on my blue sad heart just longing to be loved to belong but what can i do left here alone and so blue Blue is my heart blue are my tears blue ink runs through my veins to fall into words upon the paper that waits to be inspired by blue eyes from afar that seem to haunt me so reflections I see just you and me such longing of love hope is Thank you my friend for looking in Electric blue so blue
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

I hope the shadow will turn

I hope the shadow will turn into a real person and the blue will be the symbol of love for you Maggie. A nice little story, but an uncomfortable one if it is you as I suspect it is. Bon chance! Maggie. Yours with love Ann of Norway