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Finding You

In the silence that surrounds me in the dead of the night
The thought of you comes to my mind
And when the rain drops pierce through my skin yet again
It’s you that I crave; it’s you that I find

I try to make this pen bleed on the paper
And I try to form something lucid with my words
It’s hard for me to find the words that explicate you
It’s harder to get you out of my mind
I don’t need to hold you to know how it feels
When you’re out of sight
I only wish that I was more than I am
Wish I could do more than I can
I wish there was more to this than there can ever be
I wish there was more in this for me to see
I crave for you to see through me, the way I think I do
And I speak to you like you're a part of me
Because all I see in this broken mirror is you..
— dhruv, Aug 08, 2009

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 10 months ago

dhruv, I feel what you are feeling

but that does not make this good poetry. It is so personal I feel like a voyeur reading it. I want something more. Cheers, Jess "The political arena leaves one no alternative, one must either be a dunce or a rogue." Emma Goldman
dhruv

dhruv

16 years 10 months ago

this is much more personal

this is much more personal than the rest, i get what you're saying. i always appreciate your honest comments. a good piece should be able to connect. thanks
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raskin

16 years 10 months ago

Hi

Voyeuristic is a good way to put it. Yes I read this and it seemed so touchingly personal, but I remembered it came back and read it again. Memorable is a good word for this poem. raskin