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Poem: Nothing Gold Can Stay

Standing at the threshold
of Death's ultimate door,
my last gasp escapes me...
As I've never experienced before.

Into the Heavenly realm
I ascend in wonderment,
now housed in an incorruptible body
and thankful that from sin I did repent.

Standing in God's throne room
freed of all Earthly flesh,
my spiritual essence is energized
and feeling fully refreshed.

Now gathered unto my Savior,
unencumbered reality is more than it seems;
for to be in His Presence
is my accomplished dream.

Having been given my kingly reward,
in these times of everlasting days,
willfully I set my crown at His feet.
For upon my head, nothing gold can stay.

 

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— Joseph J. Breunig 3rd, Aug 05, 2009

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Hi Joeseph...

Welcome to the site... I do hope you like it here, it is a great place to witness different styles and there is a wide array of talent here, so you should kick your shoes off and jump in. Commenting on others poems here will let the poets know you are here... there are many poets here and one poem will slip by pretty quickly. Your poem, I felt some of the sentences were a bit long, interrupted the flow of the read out loud... and a couple of the rhymes seemed forced to me, could just be me. Your message was loud and clear. welcome again... Richard