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Changing Identities

Changing Identities

I was born as a son to my mother and
Grew as brother to my sisters
I gained knowledge as a student and
I moved with my dears as a friend
I rushed behind the money as a worker and
married a girl as her husband
I had sons and daughters as a father and
Chased many businesses as a topper
I had son and daughter in laws as an  In law and
followed the words of nobles as a follower
I prayed my lords as a devotee and
hold a stick, wore a glass as an oldman
I was taken as a procession in bed as a body and
burnt in to ashes as a  Hasthi
I am now in the air as air
Who am I? My Lord! in this world
Created me with a lot of changing identities


Hasthi is  the ash of human body come after funeral it will be mixed with in the
Holy rivers to fulfill the life of a human soul
— SAKTHEEE2007, Aug 04, 2009

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16 years 9 months ago

I really enjoyed this poem!

My only complaint is the end. I feel like the last line needs to be stronger or answer the question on the previous line a little more strongly or highlight the impossibility of answering that question conclusively or something. Also, I'm inclined to see this less as changing identities and more as a multiplicity of identities but I guess that's a matter of perspective. There are a couple of small things: -delete "I" in line 4 for consistency -"In law" doesn't need capitalization -"(held) a stick, wore (glasses) as an (old man) I hope this gets a wider read; thought-provoking.