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mantiscepter
Aug 04, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Swells Of Fate

 Lonesome eye's
through capping waves
lonely night sounds
my mind has saved

winds of mercy  
glistening dark
distant jet planes
empty grey parks

lights at street corners
trees that brush
in familiar patterns
like sundays rush

of mourners faithful
to memorial stones
with past gone memories
not long left alone

gathering in all
these swells of fate
from distant dreams
of past: to relate

 pressing moments
sealed in rhymes
held by the living
in creations chimes
— mantiscepter, Aug 04, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

This whole poem is very

This whole poem is very beautiful but for me the true pearl in this poem is the last stanza to now pressing moments sealed in rhymes held by the living in creations chimes I loved this so much but have one small suggestion ? take off [to now] pressing moments sealed in rhymes held by the living in creations chimes Dont know but the flow just goes beautifully for me without ... but with its still beautiful its your creation and your baby and I adored it ... much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

did you go to the edit

did you go to the edit button on the top of the page ... when you finished editing it make sure your curser is after the last word in the poem sometimes ive noticed it wont save if the curser isnt there love Jayne-Chloe x x x
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mantiscepter

16 years 2 months ago

ooops

It's Madness Simply Madness Ok I will remember that....