MAKE BELIEVE

"Make believe"
There is a make believe world
known 'as if'...which presents itself as
reliable,predictable, apposite at best -
yetit is a simulacruma non certainty,a vagueness, a guess,an ersatz attemptto pretend emptiness - can be addressed. Best to curse the mindand deracinate* longing from the soul,before making believe love is real,or ever yours - to uphold. BjR 3 August, '09 * deracinate - to pull up by the roots; uproot; extirpate; eradicate.

— Bonitaj, Aug 03, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Boni,

while agreeing wholeheartedly with your message here, I find myself struggling a little with your opening lines: There is a make believe world known ‘as if’… which presents as though it were reliable My nitpicky brain wants a second "as" in front of "as if", and an "itself" in l.3. But these lines were absolutely beautiful: it is a simulacrum a non certainty, a vagueness, a guess, an ersatz attempt to pretend emptiness - can be addressed. Yours, ~Nina

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Boni

I agree with Nina on every point, especially the loveliness of certain lines. I needed to look up some of the words, but I love doing that and learning words new to me! Keep up the great work! Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Great changes here

thanks girls! Certainly makes it easier to read. I have to admit I struggled a bit myself! Cat - another admission is that a lot of these words are new to me too! Often I find new words and play around with them and that is actually how this piece came about! Thanks again for your support! You gals are the best! Boni