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There I was

There I was There I was to meet her to dwell in her love as a swan She met me with love and smile reached me as a cloud in the air Her hands carried me as a cradle there I was playing as a child She was an angel among flowers I was her lover yes I was her lover Number of eyes were looking us with envy and the breeze and moon behaved as enemies Her face made the flowers to shrink Her smile made stars to hide in the clouds There I was enjoyed with her as a lover and as an hero of that garden
— SAKTHEEE2007, Aug 03, 2009

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Hello

The title is okay, but it doesn't draw a person in. Your language usage is great and I enjoyed reading about this romantic encounter. It is very sweet. Always, Cat