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Sin
Aug 02, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dance of the Deadwood Trees

Not one disinterested breeze
Gives pause to dance with brittle leaves
That fade upon the dried-out clay
Already scorched from blistered day

Scowling sun defies the shade
To brave his fiery hot tirade
While ragged weeds that did not fall
Before the mowers labored crawl

Bow down in disarrayed salute
As distant cars the air pollute
And silence crumbles to the ground
Before this disenchanted sound

And still no hint of whispered breeze
To dance among the deadwood trees
— Sin, Aug 02, 2009

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Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 10 months ago

Dance of the Deadwood Trees

I thought this to be beautiful poetry, looking forward to reading more from you~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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Sin

16 years 10 months ago

Deadwood

Thank you very much. Some days the air seems to hang so heavy that nothing seems to move under it's wieght. My first post here, I hope to make many more.
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Sin

16 years 10 months ago

Deadwood

chuckles. Thank you I'm glad it doesn't sound too...lifeless. I've been thinking it might
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

rhythm & rhyme, a pleasure, & bravo for your first write... welc

Loved this Sin, a lovely light read with a deeper edge to it, it tripped quite gaily (ah those old terms still carry it I reckon) in it's rhythm & rhyme, a pleasure, & bravo for your first write... welcome! Cheers Anni~ ` "Those who dwell among the beauties & mysteries of the earth are never alone or weary of life" ~ Rachel Carson Writer/conservationist
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Sin

16 years 10 months ago

Deadwood

Thank you so much! Hehehe...having a time learning the controls on this site...I'm looking forward to discovering here!
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Hi… came to visit you…

Hi... came to visit you... sometimes it's the poem that nearly suffocates, wanting to be born... eh? i'm not a great fan of rhyming poetry, nor do i do it well... if it happens it's quite accidental..., i do, however, love the images, the feeling you evoke. and that's what a poem does, regardless of the method... Welcome... btw i am a great fan of Bukowski's too... have written enough poems for a book perhaps.. check it out when you are drawn to so do... ~A "You can avoid reality, but you cannot avoid the consequences of avoiding reality." Ayn Rand