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glad to see you're back! And congrats on winning last month's contest! I like the concept of this hypothetical piece, but I think you could still tweak the hypothetical aspect a little. My suggestions would be: If I were to let you love me, (You would) lie down beside me softly And let me hear the music of your words (You would pull) me towards your Warm (a)nd beating heart While the night closed in around us And the gentle breeze echoed Your gentle whisperings of love I would lose myself in your soulful kiss To become one with you And count it all such sweet bliss If I were to let you love me I feel that taking out the "I would say" might make the impact of this piece a more direct one. What do you think? Yours, ~Nina

So good to see you, where have you been??? I liked your poems content but agree with Nina's suggestions... Richard

How are you! beautiful work, the needing of love and the fear of giving it all away to pain. In love there is always the smallest bit of pain in its longing. I loved this write, but I have always liked the tenderness in your poetry, thanks, Eddie

Hi Linda, This is an enchanting poem - very passionate - full of feelings. I admire your love poems. This is the first time I am reading you after ages. I have not been contributing to Neopoet regularly for some time. After my right knee replacement operation in 2007 I have had series of health problems. The nurses made my bottom a pin cushion for injections. Latest in the series was Sciatica pain on the left side of the body. How are you doing at the hospital?

Hi Linda! I have already commented on this poem. You did not respond to my comments. Since then you have not posted any poem. Are you very busy in your nursing profession or there is any other reason. Neopoet fraternity is missing you and your poems. Please come back. A Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi - A Drop and the Ocean: It torments me when wine stirs in the cup In every breath my soul burns up Wine from your cup, O curiosity! Does not quench my thirst The hunger for knowledge eats me for sup -Mohammad 'There is always room on the top, but there is no lift. You have to struggle'

Yes, it has been a long time. In January, while at work at the hospital on the Oncology floor, I decided I guess,to have a heart attack. ended up with a stent in my heart. I feel fine,now, but I did retire not too long after that incident. It wasn't the physical work that got me but the stress. Now I spend a lot of time quilting. Got a new computer as other one just would not work anymore, and then had to start all over again with new name and password, as I never could get in neopoet with my original password. sorry to hear you have not been well. Hope all is well now. Sincerely, Linda

Dear Linda, Thanks for responding. I am sad to know all that happened with you. Any way, it is gratifying that you are in good health now although not active in your profession. Now you must concentrate on writing and make up for the lost time. You have wealth of experious and your treasure of thoughts must expose its sparkle.Neopoet has not been the same in your absence. Give it the glamour it deserves. Contribute enthusiastically. It will keep you ocupied. I am in Karachi for a while where my better half is receiving treatment for Spondalitis and low iron and Haemoglobin level. Healthwise I have no serious complaint now. I shall be operated for Cataract in my left ete on July 13. Keep well and keep writing. -Mohammad