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Ink Dragon
Aug 01, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dressed

I - Dressed to wed

She's dressed to wed in creamy lace
and wears her bridal gown with pride
the veil can't hide her radiant face
no sign of hesitation in her stride
 
With calm serenity and grace
she walks up the decorated aisle
to claim her only rightful place
at his side, in his admiring smile

The wedding party sits in awe
as the two soul mates, hand in
hand, speak their marital vow
no doubt, no question pending

The old and the newthe borrowed, the bluesixpence in her shoeand two molten heartswrought into rings anew


II - Dressed to kill

You wear that bridal gown with verve
No sign of second thoughts or nerve

You sport a cleavage so divine
Adorned by flawless pearls so fine

Modest veil hides hideous heart
You know that dying is an art

Those are the pearls that were his eyes
Your bridal flowers, lilies white

You’re dressed to kill
He’d die for you

And so he will
It’s overdue


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Seren

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Nina

What a touching and beautiful poem , and what a lovely way to celebrate their weddding ... and I loved the repeating lines , for me this is a fresh perspective on a weddding and its quite beautiful .. much Love and hugz Jayne x x
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Jayne,

glad you liked it. And I am grateful that you mentioned the repeating lines, as I was afraid they might be overkill... Much love, ~Nina
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Green eyes,

thanks for coming back to make this point, it means a lot to me. Yours, ~Nina
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

I love this too

Sometimes when I read things I am not in the right mood to receive them, this time it sung for me Nna well done and the song was in the repitition of the refrain, a lovely dance to dance into life anew with. Why don't you read it in so that we can hear you speak? Yours with love Ann of Norway
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

Ann,

I marvel at my own disfunctional brain... it didn't even cross my mind that I could put it up as Spoken Word Poetry! Laughing at myself, ~Nina
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odd molly

16 years 9 months ago

Dear NinaI read your poem

Dear Nina I read your poem yesterday and I found it a bit different then. Maybe it is just in my mind but it had another flow. Have you been changing it ? if so I prefer the first posting. Maybe your last lines should be more ' connected' to the poem. Being a hopeless romantic I so love the idea of weddings.. I love dressed to wed.. Love ps.. Oh now I see that you did a major rewrite.. okay.. I understand.. I still prefer the first one.. but that is just me.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 9 months ago

My dear "odd" friend,

thank you for your comment, I am obviously far from finished with this piece, I will have to work some more on it to recapture its original flow while adding more depth to it, which I attempted here, as the first version seemed too shallow to me. Love, ~Nina
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Nina

First of all, I love the line 'no question pending.' That is cool between two people in the middle of a marriage ceremony. It also goes well with the prior 'no hesitation in her stride.' And I like the off-rhyme of awe and vow (a lot). Plus I like the order of verses. I am curious about the rhyme scheme in the last verse. Is this some classic form I don't know or is it one you made up especially? It does speed up the feel of the poem at the end, don't you think? Is that what you intended? "The old and the new the borrowed, the blue sixpence in her shoe and two molten hearts wrought into rings anew.' Yours, Deelilah
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Ink Dragon

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Dee,

sorry for the late reply. There is a rhyme that goes: "Something old, something new,/something borrowed, something blue,/and a lucky sixpence in your shoe" and describes what the bride should be wearing for good luck. I adapted it and added the part with the hearts and the rings, and yes, it does speed it up a little, as if the happy couple were dancing, I feel. I am happy that you found this little trick, you have a great eye for detail! Yours, ~Nina
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Lunegirl

16 years 3 months ago

Great read Nina,Thought the

Great read Nina, Thought the contrast between the two were funny, I likes that you rhymed both, whilst working different style stanzas in them to seperate them more. vix x ps when i got married i did the whole something borrowed something blue thing, so corny lol xxx
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Vicki,

yes, the contrast is funny, isn't it? I started out with a poem about two of my best friends getting married (romantic stuff), then had that line "those are the pearls that were his eyes" (Shakespeare, who else?) buzzing around in my head, et voilà: Dark wedding poem! Yours, ~Nina