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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jul 29, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

SOMETHING DIED

I sent you a message the subject headingjust read  "WHY"?you knew all the answers.                             So did I. I gave you a heartthe inside of which bled,you sensed  the dangerbut refused to step aside.                            Neither did I. I longed for your love.To locate its existence,psychologists had measured it. Against your will -                           We tried. I waited for your callthe phone set aside.You chose not to make itsomething in me died.                           It was I. BjR  July 29 '09
— Bonitaj, Jul 29, 2009

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About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Boni

Ouch! I can see my own reflection in the mirror of your words... remembering. Favorite lines: I longed for your love. To locate its existence, psychologists had measured it. Against your will - We tried. I waited for your call the phone set aside. You chose not to make it something in me died. It was I. Always, Cat
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

I'm delighted

It resonated for you Cat! I think these feelings are what a number of us can mirror back for one another, not just as women - but to everyone with sensitive souls. "We" as poets - the artistes! need to distill emotions into words in order to share them! Always appreciate your discerning critic's eye and your heartfelt sentiments! Boni
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Boni,

I am sorry to be coming on this piece so late, and I can't understand why you didn't get more comments. It's achingly beautiful, and I think everyone who has experienced unrequited love or been dumped by a lover can relate. The end is particularly strong. Yours, ~Nina P.S. Maybe it's the title? P.P.S. The person you're calling is not available... this just popped into my head as I was trying to think of a title alternative...
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Nina!

Appreciate your suggestion about the title - but as with much of my poetry - the sentiments expressed are, as I the writer, experience them... hence "SOMETHING DIED" must needs remain. I think the lack of exposure here is just random as it so often can be at this forum. Danke Boni