Seren

Jul 29, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Mystical Ball

Water imps playing
in the soft light
Dance the mystic
a ceremonies rite

Traveling trees
pass by with smiles
sometimes taking
months to walk miles

Families of forest
watch on with awe
tiptoe to shadows
breaking imp law

Fireflies slicing
through the wind
shearing a breeze
diving rescinds

Presented on flowers
the faeries arrive
an invitation gnomes
did help connive

A path of Lillie’s
scrolled around
paisley patterns
on the ground

Mystical nights
fantasy enthralled
the imps did host
their very own ball

— Seren, Jul 29, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

infinite_dwarf

16 years 10 months ago

Jayne

3nd, 4th, and closing stanzas were just plain awesome! I loved the description of the fireflies, and the smiling trees! ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, then piss on it and walk away!" - unknown

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Jess ...

This is for a little girl I know, she is obsessed with faeries and water imps ... and its just a bit of fun :D big smiles I am so glad someone liked it I havent finished playing round with it yet,there will be a couple of edits I ahve a couple of ideas to improve it a little ... thanks for the read and comment Jess hug and love Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Faeries!!!

Hooray for the magickal creatures! I love this enchanting piece. I'll be back to read your changes. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Cat

I just thought it would make a good addition to her birthday present if I can get it finished in time (hug) will work on it when I feel a bit better much love and hugz Jayne x x

greeneyes

16 years 10 months ago

amazing

this poem is so beautiful!you never cease impress me, you are one of my idols.i could picture this vividly, this too is something i would buy.

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Green Eyes

I love mystical poetry and so do a few others here, ever since I was little girl my Nana and my mother used to read fairy tales about dragons, princesses and imps you name it, I knew what they were, it was only natural to let my imagination run wild and start writing my mythical friends into my scribbles ... thank you so much *blush* dont know that I have been anyones idol before and I am not sure I am qualified for the position LOL there are many more here more qualified for that title than me but I love that you love my scribbles and if they bring you joy thats enough for me..:) take care hugz Jayne x x

2 Quills

16 years 10 months ago

Seren

I am definitely a lover of mystical poetry as well, I have noticed that you have many beautiful ones which you have posted here. I don’t have any critique, this is just fun writing and entertaining to read. Thoroughly enjoyable. Corey (2Quills)

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Corey I adore mystical beings ... anything ... LOL

I have them all over my house I love anything fantastical really ... I have wizards and faeries and magical crystal elephants LOL you name it I probably have it in some form ... I surprised myself by writing more and more mystical poetry its not everyones cup of tea but it is mine so glad you enjoyed the read thats all I ever aim for, the stars are for me to gaze never to touch lol ... love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Adore this poem, Jayne!!

Adore this poem, Jayne!! Seems all little girls are enamored of fairies and mystical things... unicorns...I loved and read every fairy tale (albeit many were quite dark) I could get my hands on. If we're lucky that sense of mystery, of light-heartedness is not squelched by life. I can see a fairy-poetry book for young girls emerging.. Hugs, Anna "You can avoid reality, but you cannot avoid the consequences of avoiding reality." Ayn Rand

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Anna

It is a birthday gift for a little girl whos in love with the mystical, nothing like prolonging the gift that all children hold till ... well you know life sets in ... and they are my way of escaping and flying to another world not as marred as this one ... I hold this sense of mystery for its the last vestige of my childhood but I am like Peter Pan in this one I refuse to grow up lol... much love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...