themoonman

Jul 29, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Tractoring Controls

you are my monkey
I could calm you
... but I won't
the shit in your hand suits you

dance
my puppet
dance

rattle rattle
rattle rattle

— themoonman, Jul 29, 2009

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Critiques

pinksheep

16 years 10 months ago

The

rhythm of this is tremendous, I like its raw quality-This 'goes deep'-If i could write well i would have given a better reveiw, this poem needs something more sharp to be said about it in order to match its intensity.

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Pink...

so good to see you! your review is very intense... and very felt by me... thanks. Richard

orgami

16 years 10 months ago

Delightful decadent swift

laughed well on this read not a big long laugh but a good one its like a visual clip something flickering on the television or a "happening" the something that turns your head when you are almost past and say "what the f****!?" absolutely great poetic peice in this storm of life that continous turns like the great pinwheel of a hurricane never knowing if we are in the eye or the swirling mystery of the bank wall

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks Steven...

glad it caused a good laugh, we all need that! the puppeteer in this dark comedy has full control, massive manipulative skills, strings and bars. oooooo.... thanks O... Richard

orgami

16 years 10 months ago

I saw some subtitled movies long ago

love foreign films one was eastern and had shadow puppets as part of the plot the characters were folk heroes and the puppeteers had heard their brave odessey and had made their story of boldness into a play the work was fiction of course but the puppets were real i have cynic humour black humour Comedia De larte I think some of that was called if I have my pro nunciation half assed right Love your poems Richard

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

don't know I'd feel so relaxed with a monkey with a hand full of

Hey Richard... it made me chuckle... don't know I'd feel so relaxed with a monkey with a hand full of shit lurking close by! A great little prod of a read. Don't know how you keep em so short, I'd want to add bits & then that little beauty'd be gone!!! Cheers Anni~ ` "Those who dwell among the beauties & mysteries of the earth are never alone or weary of life" ~ Rachel Carson Writer/conservationist

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Anni...

there is where the skill of the puppeteer is tested, where the shit gets slung... lol.... thanks for reading. I have some really long poems too, but I don't have much confidence that I can keep a readers attention for too awful long... I'm boring, although I refinished a bench seat today, and it looked good!!! yep... boring stuff, I know... oh well ehhh. Richard

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Richard

That little monkey is a real hellion of a troublemaker. Reminds me of a family member who likes to stir things and then stand back and watch the fur fly. Always, Cat

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Cat...

it seems every family has at least one... thanks Richard

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Raw !!!!

and I loved this one Richard its one of your best ... rattle rattle LOL he he he love that last bit much love n Hugz Jayne x x

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Hugz right back at ya Jayne...

thanks for reading my little spray of words! Richard

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Richard

I guess somebody got chained to a problem, and the problem is herself or himself. Nevertheless, I find amusing that you won't lend a hand. Is it because the situation is rather funnier than difficult? Thank you for the humor. Hugo.

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Hugo...

funny but still difficult... it was a workplace event! you know how crazy that can get. thanks Richard

Wafi

16 years 10 months ago

LOL

Loved this little great write Richard. Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Wafi...

appreciate the read man! thanks Richard

deelilah

16 years 10 months ago

Hi Richard,Loved ‘dance

Hi Richard, Loved 'dance puppet dance' The title made me wonder if it's a tractor your talking about. Then with the rattle's I think of a jack hammer. Then calming the monkey, but you won't, reminds me of changing a baby. Just what did you see/think when you wrote this? I am truly curious. Yours, Deelilah

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Ok Dee...

but only for you... lol... thanks for reading and wondering. tractoring controls... a tractor has an operator, like your truck... this write was about a guy that was slinging shit my way, pushing buttons I should react to, but by controlling my emotions from spraying outward, he only succeeded in making himself look bad... rattling the monkey's cage... rattle rattle mean when I want to be, I guess we all are at times, pushed by the right ones. I felt like I was riding my tractor and it was running so good! Richard

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

How did i miss this??????

How did i miss this?????? Must have been while I was dancing to the hurleygurley, organ grinder.... Moonman, I'd give you a high 5 but my hands are full of coins... Love, ~A "You can avoid reality, but you cannot avoid the consequences of avoiding reality." Ayn Rand

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Hail to the grinder....

You have the kind of humor I find really funny. I got mine from both parents, but feel more of my dad. He had a co-worker that was eating lunches on the sly, so he took some exlax and melted it, scraped the chocolate from an eclair.... and yes, the thief made himself look real bad. Love how you let him look bad by not going for the shit he threw. Rattle, rattle. He shook the shit out his cage and splattered himself! Gee

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Moonman

Quirky, witty, clever and made my day. You should get into comical writing. It reminds me of the zoo, as a kid, monkeys, any apes for that matter frightened me, picking at their butts and waiting until some poor kid got close, chucking their shit at you. I am scarred for life. Funny, Funny, I enjoyed this. Lyz XX