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Dance of the Senior Citizen

When your life is "pedestrian", at best
and it's too late to wear a swimsuit,
when gravity pulls down on you harder
spiriting away all of your cute".

Then your nether region seems so distinguished
for you've recently sprouted gray hairs,
and when young people don't take you seriously
and the older ones share not your cares.

After you've realized the problem
is that you're answering all your own questions,
and everyone thinks that you're stubborn
when you're just sticking to your own "guns".

That's when you dance with the wind
even though you don't know all the words,
sing though you don't know the "steps"
its all crap, and it's meant for the birds.

Spew out as much nonsense as possible
no one's listening at all, anyway
stay up through the night planning all your revenge
and pull all your stunts off, in the day.

Laugh, when it's so inappropriate
that if looks could kill, you'd be quite dead,
you're just getting even for all of the years
that everyone played with your head !
— docmaverick, Jul 29, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 10 months ago

why did you post this 5 times?

a site glitch? Must have been, cos of one a day rule. Cheers anyway, good poem. Did you hear about the performance artist, a 20's woman who disguised herself as an old person for a year and travelled round America? She said she would much rather have been treated as a black, jewish gay whale. Compassion for those of failing eyesight and balance and tolerance for playing games with your head! teehee An important write, doc, Cheers, Jess
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 10 months ago

"Site glitch" truly is....

...the operative word here ! It was really crazy, the way it did it. The site merely began "multiplying"! Thanx for the comment, Jess "Write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.
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bjp

16 years 10 months ago

Dear docmaverick,

I like the poem. We have many of these experiences in our own life. Olya does say the most outrageous things at parties and out and about (not that that is a recent phenomena). I don't risk what she does, if you can believe that. I do think you hit the mark again with this one. You don't need quotes around pedestrian, guns and steps. They are mostly reserved for when one intends tongue in cheek interpretations or you are making a reference to something. Whereas, the closest to that is steps but you are using it as a serious metaphor. That paragraph, by the way, is demonstrative of the growth you are sprouting as a poet (more than gray hairs in the nether regions): That’s when you dance with the wind even though you don’t know all the words, sing though you don’t know the steps its all crap, and it’s meant for the birds. Brian
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Hi Doc,

a thoroughly sound write, expressing frustration on many levels. My favourite stanza: That’s when you dance with the wind even though you don’t know all the words, sing though you don’t know the “steps” its all crap, and it’s meant for the birds. (By the way, I think it should be “it’s all crap” here.) How do you feel about leaving out the quaotation marks? They seem to be a little distracting here to me. Yours, ~Nina P.S. Copied my comment from http://www.neopoet.com/node/25403 so you can delete the accidental posting.