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Revenge Tastes....

His cloak whipping in the wild wind,

He looked about at the carnage.

Once again they had pushed him too far.

His cold heart pumping icy blood,

They had mistaken his silence,

And his waxen visage for fear.

Totally surprised at the fury,

Unbelieving of the destruction,

They died.

Wondering in some odd fashion,

If they were indeed brainless,

He opened some of their heads.

Satisfaction of grey matter, splattered his hands.

Plunging fingers into chests,

He found bulbs of blood and squeezed.

Gutless.... they are now.

Evidenced by screams as they ran,

Entrails pulled from their stomachs.

Eyes bulging from terror,

Not convinced of this nightmare,

Some fainted, only to awake to fetid breath.

Life sucked from pulsing veins,

The dribbles leaking out on the stone floor,

The light in their eyes slowly dimmed.

The focus of his intent, backed ever so carefully,

Slipping on the intestines of his companions.

The brashness and bravado replaced by horror.

Knowing that nothing could save him,

He resolved to die as well as he could.

He didn't scream right away.

Thinking that at least this one had a vestige

Of honor he let him strike out.

Fists of flesh broke under the strength of desperation.

Pushing his iron fingers under the rib-cage,

Grasping the beating heart,

He slowly squeezed and watched the pain flow.

Nails scrabbling on the hard surface of his skin,

Broke and tore free from fingertips.

Scrolls of flesh peeled up and fell to the floor.

Madness gripped his victim,

And he gibbered, slowly sliding into oblivion.

Fangs wide, he bit deliciously and chewed the nose.

MMMMMMM, tastes like chicken.

 

— Geezer, Jul 29, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

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Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

I recognise the skill & effort here! Bravo lad, revoltingly bril

Oh Gee... can I say YUCK!!!? That was HORRIBLE, you're mean (said with smile of affection firmly wedged between furrowed brow of distaste), you knew I would have to read it being such a Gee fan... now I know what you meant by "off to do some horror" errrrrk... But really well written & if you must choose such a yucky genre (my own opinion, worth only that to me so no notice should be taken & I know you wont take offence, since you know I am among your safe a sacred circle of round table peers... ). I am a softy in matters of taste, preferring harmony & beauty if possible, but I still recognise the skill & effort here! Bravo lad, revoltingly brilliant... I do see new levels of skill building & being refined each post YAY!!! Much warmth now I'm off to bath my poor eyes & listen to something sweet & soothing!!! Cheers Anni~ ` "Those who dwell among the beauties & mysteries of the earth are never alone or weary of life" ~ Rachel Carson Writer/conservationist
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Revoltingly Brilliant

Thank you, I'm sorry that you had to bathe your eyes. This is not a new thing for me, just a better presentation.[if I do say so myself] I go off like this once in a while to help rid myself of the emotional turmoil that bedevils me now and then. Thank you for the words of praise. I know it must have been hard for you, seeing you are the old softy you are. Try to forget that you ever saw it.[like my victims]. I'm not sure if I am done yet, seeing how well it has been recieved. I will try to even things out with something equally sweet, but..... Gather 'round the 'Round Table' my regal friends, and you shall hear.. Love and wet sucking kisses,~Gee.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

by God this was gory!

rather like sitting through a Chain Saw Massacre movie - which I've not done either. As Anni says, much descriptive talent though. Liked your title! Just one technicality - I think it should be Disbelief? Unbelief is used more in a concrete - atheistic sense. Not 100% sure but check it out! Best regards Boni
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Unbelieving

1. Unbelieving: Doubting; skeptical; INCREDULOUS! 2. Disbelieving, especially in religious matters. I suppose that I could use the words 'refusing to believe' but I like the way unbelieving sounds and looks. Thanks anyway. And thank you for the comments that I am sure were just as difficult for you to make as they were for Anni. I know that is not your usual genre either, so I really appreciate the effort that the both of you made. ~ Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

I promise never to piss you off Gee

LOL Holy Shite I near heaved !! but that will tell you your poem had its effect the imagery was very vivid for me in this piece, well done you really let fly and look at a gory but well writen rant you made, I cant use the word love for this one Gee, but how about admire the craft and skill you have shown LOL Biggest hugs and Love Jayne x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Heaving your guts.....

Heaving your guts is a lot better than losing them the way I describe, I suppose. LOL. I am amazed at the reception that this one has recieved! Careful, you all may have loosed the monster in me! Thank you Jane, I promise to try and even things out in a bit, with something so sickenly sweet that you may well heave from all the sugar! But for now... L & Hugz, Gee.
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Gee...

put me in mind of Spawn, but in a very bad mood... thought it was very descriptively good... and gory as hell... well done! Richard
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Spawn

Spawn in a bad mood huh? Thank you, Sir! I thought that this might have gotten it out of my system, but with seeing the kind of effect it has had, I am tempted to do at least one more. After which I will try to balance the scale with something equally as sacchrine. ~ Gee.
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orgami

16 years 10 months ago

MMmmmm cooking my chicken for lunch/dinner/breakfest

I remember Lon Chaney and Bela Lugosi Nosferatu great write Gee i have had the fortune or misfortune to meet real madmen or lucid ones whom committed atrocites of Man against man spoken to kind souls who went for their country and served in the horrors of service You write well and with humour just the eccentric word use that I find appealing E.g "Bulbs of blood" I liked that one better go check on my dinner im so hungry
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Chicken Dinner?

I am not particularly fond of chicken, as my wife will testify. [I will eat it] But just thought that the well-known phrase was a hoot. I really don't know why it came to mind when it did. I guess that the incongruity of it after the bloodiness appealed to me. Twisted sense of humour I guess. Thanks for taking the time out of making your dinner to comment. Your frend, Gee. P.S. The line 'bulbs of blood' was written with thinking about how you would describe the heart in this instance, so, more thanks.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Gee

That was hypnotically horrible, just the way I like it! It was like a train wreck, I couldn't look away and I loved the ending. My hero! Always, Cat
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Hero!

The effect was just as I intended. I was hoping that I could hold the interest of anyone reading it until the end. The hero doesn't really like chicken all that much, but I think I was looking for an ending to show my contempt for the victims. Laughing at their horrible end was just the thing! I am very pleased to have been able to get such a good response from the horror-lovers like yourself. Thank you, ~ Gee.
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ngaioBeck

16 years 10 months ago

revenge

What does one say to such a writing,(that hasn't already been said). Good graphics. Reminds me of a bunch of stockbrokers at a seniors convention
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Revenge

I thank you for your comments and will take that comment about the stockbrokers to mean that you are involved in white-collar work, and I guess it could be a vicious scene. ~ Geezer