Meticulous Pyre

I quite liked this, though didn't miss the darker intent, nicely woven none-the-less, I am making efforts to overcome my desire to choose poems to my taste. I prefer less cynicism, but this is supposed to be about creative writing. Interesting metaphores & well placed I thought. Hard to pick just one stanza as a favourite, but this is rather brilliant... "Seeking redemption in absolution the philosophers of the fortuitous occasion find only the machinery of futility looking for its’ next prodigal beggar" I love those lines that hold such a variety of interpretive fulfilment. You use delicious words, many of my favourites, so rich in emotive representation & these lines are crowded with them. I could easily interpret, but it wouldn't matter in the end, it's what it speaks & how well it is formed. It is one of those writes I think do not require any change in terms of production. Hope the pyre is comfy. Great poetry Cheers Anni~ ` "Those who dwell among the beauties & mysteries of the earth are never alone or weary of life" ~ Rachel Carson Writer/conservationist

The opening stanza really worked for me! Liked the line: 'with penchants for self-indulgence'... Isn't that an all too human trait? Excellent use of imagery and vocabulary throughout, as Anni has stated! Very good piece! Keep up the great work! Boni

This work simply rocks. The last two stanzas are kick-me-in-the-head wow. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race