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Better Days...

Where is my friend
that bathes me in his warm smile
caressing me with the flames
that open every pore upon my skin,

Warmth he gives
to all of those who reach for him, adoring him
for the the pleasures that he brings,

How can it be?
I have not seen him in so many days
he has been hidden behind this curtain of grey,

The curtain of grey
that dampens my very mood
keeping me cloistered inside these walls
my only hope is to wait
so I can finally leave the confines of my rooms,

Venturing out into this gloom go few
and when they do
they shroud themselves
avoiding the dampness that constantly loom,

When you pass them on the street
their eyes are averted for they are looking down
drops pour down their faces
as if they were many tear's,

Oh,
This flood that pours down from this curtain of grey
running and following
every contour of my darkened earth,

Please, winds come and help
my bright and shining friend
part away this curtain of grey
and let the light shine in through my window pane
bringing me the pleasures of better days.
— Eduardo Cruz, Jul 26, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Bring me the pleasure of better days

Poignantly sad and beautiful , as you always do , I adored this one well done ... Love Jayne x x Oh and one thing I forgot to mention I think in the fourth stanza ? I thought you could try dampen instead of [dampens]dampen my mood dont know I could be wrong I am tired LOL
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Jayne,

thanks for the compliment, I don't know about the always, but I'm not one to not appreciate a compliment. I see your point with "dampen" but I was going for it as if it happens a lot, hence the dampens. Thank you for pointing that out, it mean to me that you payed attention to the words, and for me that is very important. Thanks for the "high five" Always, Eddie
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

I almost forgot and gave you stars

A gloomy poem full of despondent imagery and yearning brought back a few memories of my own. My favorite lines are: Please, winds come and help my bright and shinning friend part away this curtain of grey and let the light shine in through my window pane bringing me the pleasures of better days. Always, Cat
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Cat,

I guess that is all a writer wants is to provoke thought. thank you for that, it make me feel that I accomplished something. thanks always, Eddie
dbaker

dbaker

16 years 10 months ago

Your Piece

I liked this piece. It is the first of yours that I have read. You definitely have your own style. Although, it sounds like you might be inspired by Lorca or Paz. In anycase, I think it is a brilliant piece. All my absolute best! -DSB
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

DSB

Thanks for stopping by to read, and no not Lorca or Paz. My writing is very dark, because it's where I come from, I just tried something lighter here. I'm glad you liked it. I don't believe I read any of yours either. Thanks, Eddie
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years 10 months ago

Eddie

I especially liked your closing stanza as well. My only correction is shinning -> shining. I hope your better days are coming true, friend. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Sundown you better take care if I find you've been creepin' 'round my back stairs. Sometimes I think it's a sin when I feel like I'm winnin' when I'm losing again" - Gordon Lightfoot
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Jess,

thanks on the correction, from grammar school. Drop the "E" before adding "ing" I find at 55 that I'm getting lazier then when I was 54. I have to proof read my writing, see I drop the "e" in writing. I get one check for that, yes? thanks for reading Bud, Eddie