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Moaning and Groaning

Tweet, tweet, tweeting happily do they sing
water they do drink
from their green cup leafs

Flap, flap, flapping, your little feathered wings
dancing in the shade
of the grand oak tree,

Work, work, working, to nest upon this tree
to the highest branch
for not an eye to see,

Sit, sit, sitting, trying to hatch your eggs
three little fledgling
born upon this day,

Feed, feed, feeding, tweeting little birds
soon there will be air
beneath your baby wings,

Fly, fly, flying, as far as you can go
trying to start a nest
beyond your families own,

Cry, cry, crying, how hard it is for me
I listen to the birds
who never seem to moan?

Try, try, trying to make it on my own
maybe take a lesson
from the birds who never groan?
— Eduardo Cruz, Jul 24, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Hey, Eddie, I did a lot of

Hey, Eddie, I did a lot of moaning and groaning giving birth. lol. This poem, however, has wings. ~A "You can avoid reality, but you cannot avoid the consequences of avoiding reality." Ayn Rand
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Anna,

well it wasn't about childbirth but that's a reason to truly moan and groan. It's about life in general and all the complaining we do, and here are the birds that are at risk every single day but they do survive. But your take is good too. Thanks for coming to read, I just wanted to write something that was not dark for a change. Eddie
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 10 months ago

Lol. Eddie… “sit, sit,

Lol. Eddie... "sit, sit, sitting, trying to hatch your eggs three little fledgling born upon this day" isn't? You wrote it...and yes, my take: i interpreted it as giving birth to a poem...and giving birth to something new... Either way, i reiterate: your poem has wings! ~A "You can avoid reality, but you cannot avoid the consequences of avoiding reality." Ayn Rand
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

thanks sweetie,

Either way it all sounds good! that was the idea of the triple words, as if they were flapping wings. So your take does work. "In the eye of the beholder" thanks, Eddie
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 10 months ago

Eddie

I like the playfulness of this poem, and the childlike freshness of a morning, probably in the park or the countryside. Thank you. Hugo.