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Sliced Bindings

How did it feel
to slide the knife in?

Did it heat blood
to trick with a grin ?

Opening my heart
and letting you in,
was the start to regret
as my trust rescinds

Friendly you were
kindness was shown,
all this facade
I’m here to bemoan

Sharing my life
family and friends,
all this being used
for subtle ends

Gave you the breath
that flows inside,
but all this time
you lived one big lie

And finally to find
your full of shit,
How does it feel ?
To look a right tit

Nice to my face
you sneer at my back,
sometimes I think
I’d give you a smack

But lower myself ?
I never ever will,
I’ll leave that to you,
It gives such a thrill

— Seren, Jul 21, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Sweet Jayne

I can't think of much that is worse than the betrayal of someone you thought of as a close friend, unless it is the betrayal of a family member. (I have experienced both.) I'm so sorry for you, especially now when you have so much on your plate. You expressed yourself excellently in this piece. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Cat

I wrote this a while back , I sat on it and then when I was in a nice frame of mind read it and decided yep LOL I am going to submit it so here it is ... me having a mini dummy spit LOL he he feels good eh ? .. (hugz)much Love Jayne x x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Wow Jayne!

For a minute there I thought you had been dumped - not dumped on! You said that with such palpable vile and sneering! Good write - get it off your chest I always say! lol Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Boni

Yeah Boni, I aint no angel, and I have a sting in my tail when I get pissed off LOL and this one was writen quite a while ago and I only decided this last week to submit it ... and its always good to vent ... Jayne
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

LOL it came to me just a

LOL it came to me just a while ago , its like my last words on the subject LOL so sliced bindings ? slicing the bind that tied me so to speak , I thought it apt ... hugs so glad you liked it hun (hug) big love Jayne x x
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Sliced Bindings...

An excellent title, that always helps to draw the readers, and your poem was highly effective, cause now I just want to poke someone in the eye... thanks for sharing, and for being here for us Jayne. 6th stanza... your... you're... twice. other than that, I found nothing to critique... Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you Richard I wrote

Thank you Richard I wrote Sliced as the title and after I submitted it sliced bindings came to me LOL I am still working on this one and the 6th stanza is what I am focusing on, those two your's, I am trying to get rid of one will keep working on it till i find a solution that doesnt change the tone too much , the tone is exactly as I want it but that 6th stanza has driven me mad trying to get it right ... Much Love Jayne x x
Q

Quillsvein1

16 years 10 months ago

wow

this is a very honest expression of some serious, and it would seem understandable, bitterness that you harbor toward a deceitful person. i wish i could pen my resentments like that, all good poets can. excellent (it satisfied me applying the poem to people i individually still resent). GB
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

GB

I wrote this one a while back and because I was still upset at the situation I decided to shelve it till I was calm and decide if i want to submit it or not ... I am glad it resonated in you it was writen that anyone could relate and resent .. I am glad you enjoyed it and thank you so much for the comment and the read ... Regards Jayne-Chloe
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

Sliced Bindings

Whatta Jerk! You effectivly eviscerated him! Was castration an option you considered? LOL...HEE,HEE... Well, maybe if you would try: And to finally find you so full of shit It's real clear to me, you're abrim with it! Just a thought... Hope you find the solution, it's a very good write. L& Hugz,Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

LMAO … Gee big smiles I

... Gee big smiles I dont always talk sweet though I am a placid person poke me once too often I bite back LOL ... I wrote this a while ago and wasnt sure whether to submit it asked a friend and then sat on it for another week did an edit and thought yep why not I have read rants much moreeeeee ummm sharper ? LOL he he he much Love and hugz Jayne x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 10 months ago

I am assuming

I am assuming that 'tit' means something different over/under there. Up/here, it's a teat, [usually] a woman's breast. I do get the idea though. Great rant! Never want to be on the bad side of you! LOL hee, hee, hee. L & Hugz,Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Gee

Over here you can be 'a right tit' ... which meens your a bit of a clown LOL ... A Tit here is also a shortened name for a bird ... And yep a tit is also a breast .. And I cannot see you getting on my wrong side Gee I am normally very placid its only when i get stepped on once too often that the claws come out he he Love N hugz Jayne x x
N

Neuro11

16 years 10 months ago

I think that betrayal is a

I think that betrayal is a really ugly thing, and did a really good job conveying the really bitter emotions it conjours. Keep up the good work;P
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Betrayal is an ugly thing

Betrayal is an ugly thing and I always feel better after I let it out thanks for the read and the comment much apprecaited and I am glad you liked it .. Regards Jayne x p.s btw I look forward to reading more from you ..