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Alone (Revisited)

It’s been a long time to your heartAlone here in the dark I asked for rainAll I could find was 8th Avenue Along the well worn pathYou pick up discarded thingsFor the stories they might tellAnd I take the bruisesBecause we put them there I walk the avenue to youIt’s been a long, long time to your heartThe story is the sameDark again, and empty tooWith the words only we know Hoping that somehow this timeThe words will oblige my desperate soulAnd try again to pierce the darkSo that the night does not fall in on meWhen I walk along 8th Avenue
— Michael Anthony, Jul 18, 2009

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Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

Hey Mike!

I liked this one! Sorry I'm coming to it so late - but merit can always wait for it's reward! Your poems always have such a "New York" feel to them - maybe its the mention of 8th Ave, or very specific places. quick suggestion for the above. Why not end the second last stanza with a past tense of know i.e. knew - so that it rhymes with too? Does that work for you? he he! Note my incessant need to have these paltry little rhymes! See how you go! CHeers Boni