Too much Traffic (I'm not listening anymore)

each thought is a car
all day it's fucking rush hour
motor away mind

— faerybeki, Jul 18, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Beki,

I'm laughing, this is such a rant! (Hadn't expected that from my sweet tempered little fairy ;) I especially love the last line, it's highly original. Yours, ~Nina P.S. I'm not rating at the moment, waiting for the new trial to come up...

faerybeki

17 years ago

Nina, seems I’m capable of

Nina, seems I'm capable of suprising even you :) Sometimes my head does my head in lol, happy you enjoyed the play in the last line :) much love Beks xx Ps I'm not rating either.. x

Seren

17 years ago

Short sweet little rant from

Short sweet little rant from my favourite fae folk lol and like Nina I like this evil little rant .. beautiful work sweet faery with claws ;) much Love and Hugs Jayne x x

faerybeki

17 years ago

Thanks Jayne, glad you liked

Thanks Jayne, glad you liked it. I'm scorpio, so maybe I do have some sting occasionally lol Hope you're doing ok babe, much love and hugs too, Beki xx

themoonman

17 years ago

Beki...

motoring thoughts crashing dreamed realities into poetic clash the mad dash ... rush hour loved seeing this from your pen. Richard

faerybeki

17 years ago

Thanks Richard, I suppose it

Thanks Richard, I suppose it is a bit different for me, more argh! perhaps than most of the stuff I post lol. And I hardly EVER swear in my poetry but it seemed to work here. Happy it gleaned such a poetic response from you :) always a pleasure seeing and being seen by you, much love Beki xx

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