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Midnight Murder

Midnight Murder

Dim black and white,
as she enters the stage,
murder on mystery lane...


She has no clue,
what will happen in a few.
Her gorgeous dress,
cream silk and perfect,
wont be the same after this day. 

Man enters left,
murder in his mind,
she has no clue,
of who, where, or why...

Hiding behind the plant,
golden and green.
he makes his way over,
with a cautious gaze,
on the beauty in cream.

Little white flower,
upon my little vase,
shattering with a crack,
as I fall on my bed,
now covered in a glaring red.

Oh,how I wish,
I could live through this.
The revenge is set and clear.
You wont live long,my dear,
I'll find my way,
to make sure you pay.

A knife in her back,
he runs out the right,
into the night,
leaving no tracks,
to be seen in midnights sight.

Curtains close,
black and white murder came today.
But you still dont know whats to come.
Of the murder on mystery lane.

— ANC1996, Jul 17, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Florida, ZZC

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, Homer.

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ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

((Grr))

Im having computer issues, So if you see something wrong, Ive tried to edit but its a jerk and chnges back. The end should be in italics!! Peace, Adri
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bella1

16 years 10 months ago

OMG

That was great adri check out my newest poem loved it peace your bff bella
ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

Okie Dokie!

Thanks Gurl,But im still going to strangle you... for hanging up on me >:) rawr (be afraid)... And yes,I read your new oh so spectacular poem! Peace out girl scout! Your bff AdriNicole (still not used to Bella!I likes Anabella!)
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 10 months ago

This is deceptively clever and deep

By using the structure of a play it makes that 5th verse so much more powerful. My only complaint is that- But only soon my murderer, will too be dead! Is both bad grammar and a promise unfulfilled. Will there be a sequel? Cheers, Jess
ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

Tanks :]

Yeah im gonna fix some things in it, Make it perdier :] And yes theres gonna be a second part. Id really suck if the girl just died and it was 'The end' Lol,Well thanks Jess! Peace out, AdriNicole
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 10 months ago

Excellent revisions!

I always add a star for improved revisions, but don't get a big head. I am yet to be convinced this poem will change my life. 8) oh and "ruby lips"? uh uh, even in the dramatic stage context too cliched Cheers, Jess
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bella1

16 years 10 months ago

P.S

forgot to vote lastime love the changes! peace out your bff bella
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

=0

Much delicious writing here. I love the dark and dangerous stuff. My only complaint is the repetition of this line: she has no clue, Always Cat p.s. Loved the title!
ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks,

Thanks for the comment and semisuggestion :] I love dark writings too, and danger is always fun lol Peace out, AdriannaNicole
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AlexaGrace

16 years 10 months ago

Hey,,

Hey,I like it -
ANC1996

ANC1996

16 years 10 months ago

Haha,

Thatd be seriously freaky! Haha