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meic
Jul 16, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

MOONBATHING NAKED

Moonbathing naked:
eraser beams hide so much.
One blemish remains.

“Shit-with-sugar-on!”
a cuss, thought lost in childhood,
hits the spot tonight.

Vodkatini cure:
a toast – me … and a hard-on
with nowhere to go
 

— meic, Jul 16, 2009
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years ago

this is good

and I enjoyed it greatly. Short. Sweet. And to the point. Thanks for the smile that reading this gave me. Always, Cat
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meic

17 years ago

Giving you a smile is

Giving you a smile is sufficient praise. Thank you! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

Meic

As far as form and content, I've nothing to add. Like Cat, I appreciated the shortness of this write - though I found myself wanting to chastise you for berating yourself (or so it seemed). ~Jess K. ----------------------- "If the shoe fits, buy another one like it!" - George Carlin "If you default on payment to an exorcist, do you get repossessed?"
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meic

17 years ago

Naked? Aroused? … and then

Naked? Aroused? ... and then chastised! God, my vodkatini glass runneth over! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

Hmm...

So what DID your second stanza mean, then? I took it to mean a personal slight that you made towards your self-worth. If I was correct in my presumption, then yes, being chastised is right in order. If not... well... then I guess you can chastise me! LMFAO! Hope you enjoy your moonlit garden loungings, then. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "If the shoe fits, buy another one like it!" - George Carlin "If you default on payment to an exorcist, do you get repossessed?"
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meic

17 years ago

I suppose it’s a piece of

I suppose it's a piece of self-ridicule - after all a man of my advanced years should be settling for dignified decency - not sitting in such a place in such a condition. So ... chastisement is in order - how do you want me [teehee]. See what I mean - incorrigible! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years ago

O my. So you DO have a cure

O my. So you DO have a cure for a manly *curse* lol (God, I'd be in deep shit if I were a man....i'd have to wear a full skirt all the time...) Agreed here with the other ladies. ~A "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot
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meic

17 years ago

A cure … maybe not - but a

A cure ... maybe not - but a decent [indecent?] anaesthetic. Well, that's my excuse for drinking vodkatinis naked in the small hours in my garden. Quite pleasant, actually ... and coooooling! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Meic

I agree with all the above and chastise you along with the rest you are naughty (hug).. Love Jayne :)
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years ago

O. but when he’s bad,

O. but when he's bad, he's very good...that's what they say, anyway. ~A "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years ago

I too....

...know of this hard-on. Once, I stood up to look for my hat and it was still in my lap. She was quite the "looker". Lol. I enjoyed the brevity of this piece. Brief in duration, but long on quality. I sooo believe and support naked moonbathing, rather than naked sunbathing...guess I'm a big fan of the shadows at my age. "Write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.
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meic

17 years ago

shadows ...

Oh I agree, shadows are good - the more the merrier at my age - and I thank you kindly for your comments. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

(“Quote:-For every beauty

("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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