Rains of Scattered Yesterday (From Chat)

Rains of Scattered Yesterday

I sit beneath the candlelight in this musty room
bleary eyes burning from tears ever-present
The years have not taken the edge of loss
from this shattered heart;
how long, a night -a thousand years?
I've lost track
A million times I've cursed myself
A million times I've tried to die
Why did I listen - why did I choose?
If I could do it over
I'd shoot the bastard!
Instead, I took his gift,
immortality, a boon I thought,
but that was 1216.
I''ve lost track of things
All I have left is
rains of scattered yesterday.

As you can see, the mind works oddly at times with certain titles without poems. Not only has this poem resulted, but I am also writing a story called "The Man Who Couldn't Die" based on this. Chapter one is posted here right now.

— Rett, Jul 16, 2009

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Critiques

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

wow Rett!

"All I have left is rains of scattered yesterday." Loved that line! What a stunning write. Amazing what can inspire us sometimes! Cheers Boni

Rett

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you Boni

I am very pleased that you found it enjoyable. Titles without poems in chat are very interesting. They throw out a title and everyone writes a poem with what the title inspires in them. A while back, a challenge was issued to write what you would see from the window of a car driving down the road and it resulted in a novel. It is being submitted to various places, but has not been picked up by anyone as of yet. This one has inspired a short story that I haven't finished, but am having fun with. Thanks so much for reading. Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

This reminds me

Of the vampire Louis in "Interview With The Vampire." (a book) by Anne Rice. I don't know if you are familiar with it or not. I found this piece appetizing as it held my interest and stimulated my imagination. I have no criticisms, but I am sure you will probably be changing the lines here and there. I will look for the changes. Always, Cat

Rett

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you Cat

Yes, I am familiar with both the book and the movie. I really liked them. I am very pleased that you enjoyed it and yes, I will probably make changes along the way. Nothing I have written has ever escaped unscathed and most likely never will. *LOL* Here is a little preview of a moment in the story I'm writing and he isn't a vampire. *LOL* "Do you understand what agony is - not just torture, but pure, unadulterated agony? How would you like to be burned at the stake as a sorcerer, then find your virtually fleshless body buried alive. Do you know what it is like to dig yourself out of a grave” To dig and die, only to wake up again hours later, then repeat the process until you reach the surface?" Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Ohhh

Thanks for that little teaser... it was deliciously dark! Always, Cat

Rett

16 years 10 months ago

LOL Thanks Kelsey

I didn't even think of your age. Second line hyphenated word- Why yes m'am, I do believe you are correct and I thank you for pointing that out. *bowing most eloquently* Try not to read the cursing. although you are centuries old, you are a centuries old teen.. *L* Gotcha. Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

poetic lillies

16 years 10 months ago

INSPIRING!!!!

This was good!!!!! It brought along all kinds of feelings and emotions. your poem is totally awesome and it has great character!!! I really felt the emotions of the narrator- absolutley wonderful

Rett

16 years 10 months ago

Thank you!

I truly appreciate it. I'm so glad that you found it readable. *S* Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

orgami

16 years 10 months ago

heard a word from the Radio CBC for us canuks

Anguish jarred me at my part time work not having heard this for awhile okay that was just from somewhere Your poem is appealing a read in my mind of present Mr R