Knee deep in.... (Acrostic)

knowledge passed like scenery on a train, gave a feeling of riding on a train, on a lengthy journey, where one has the time to sort out their thoughts. Maybe it is just me, but I felt with this line: like a overwhelming pouring of facts and to many ideas!!! the tripple exclamation points were a bit of over-kill. I really liked the rest of the poem... so reflective. Always, Cat

I'll give it another read. Always, Cat *Update I still like it, but I don't see how it is an Acrostic. I must be dense because I don't understand the true message you wanted to get across... I'm sorry.

"kneedeep in what" when I saw your title, Eddie! Now I know. Cleverly done! But I wouldn't be me if I didn't have any suggestions... Beginning at the beginning, returning to the start Undoubtedly I have not learned the learning I did try, Lamentations on the pass, knowledge passed like scenery on a train, Lengthen a memory of things I had looked upon at length, Surrendering to understanding but understanding not, Hindered by some thoughts of thoughts I tried to have, Ideas incorporated in a process, in a place (where?) there were no ideas, Torrential was the (downpour) like (an) overwhelming pouring of facts (into) many ideas!!! Please pay special attention to your punctuation, Eddie, I've added the odd comma or two here. What do you think of my suggestions? Yours, ~Nina

I like the idea of a hidden acrostic. To support this I would consider parenthesizing the lines that are not part of the acrostic message. This would also ease the repetition, reflection, and negation that interplays between the main and supporting lines. Also, last line - I'm with cat on the multiple exclamation points and the "to" should be "too," which is a common proofreading mistake we all miss at times. When I read this straight I get a lot of stumbles and uncertain direction. When I structure it as statements and asides, it flows much smoother for me. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

You're not coming around ta thinkin' like us Texans now are ya? Dang good write you old pirate, or maybe I should call you a Bull--er--fighter. yeah, um, Bullfighter. I love the Acrostic! Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

Your poem is very good, but it could be improved by imagery. Thank you for sharing. I'm also learning, but I took the liberty of commenting. I hope you do the same on some of my poems. Saludos. Hugo