A Greedy Want

Now that is a concep I agree with... I always want more. Sometimes it pays off to be a greedy wench, LOL! Beautifully written, and perfectly plain intentions. No hidden agenda here. Love the title, the content and the execution. Love, cat

better than sex, cryky!!!! Love it. I'd want it all night!! :)fleur

to say that READING this is better than sex!!

Wellllllllllllllllllllll it's funny how no men have *critiqued* this...yet. For me (so far) laughter is almost as good as sex, and rapture is better than sex. (Though I sure as hell would like to experience both simultaneously.) That's still on my wish list. lol. ~A p.s. about the poem....yummers! "It is unwise to be too sure of one's own wisdom. It is healthy to be reminded that the strongest might weaken and the wisest might err." Mahatma Gandhi

lol... I pictured the old cartoon character floating up in the air with an ummmmmmm on the way down... only to hit the ground going... more... more... more! Jayne you have such a sparkle surrounding, it would be impossible for me not to love it. I did find one stanza I thought I could offer a suggestion on... Wind thrashing hair caressed my shape together were paired in mountains landscape... Wind thrashing hair caressing my shape and together we are paired in mountains landscape just minor stuff though... the recharging moonman... lol... Richard

the wantonness. My mother'd be shocked. She always told me women hate sex. Or even the mention of it. It's taken me near a lifetime to begin to question her wisdom in that regard. Thanx for the further enlightenment. Something I always appreciate. In spades. Hugs, Chuck

I am so glad you wrote. What a line: "blisters of sin". I read elsewhere you feel looked down upon. I wasn't sure why. You have intelligence, pluck and adventurism, loyalty, endurance, discretion, openness, tenderness, toughness and compassion in your corner. This poem is written like an ideal feminine unfolding of romance. There is everywhere that evidence of gentleness and that deep gesture for rhyme is like candles surrounding a warm bathing, or the candle trees lit for catholic prayers for the ah... to proceed slowly. Your poetry in the whole, has little currents, eddies, here with a turn to endorphins of change, there to the sweet comforts of the known. Brian

wow woman You know what to ask for!!! heh heh LIke poetry my personal experience has been to have been with passionate women and women with cool ardour I miss the women who love their drives and influences and ask for more this poem has awakened some good memories for me ITs fun its passionate and sensous esecially like the capitals on paragraphs the spacing and the font style for this one

Finally! Tonight, the house is ours! Jason is off to his other grandma's, Jody is out with Carrie [hardcore chick] and the dog only talks in poems. So if I don't stick around too long after chat........Loved your poem, made me think that maybe you might be hinting to hubby.....you need cure? Hope you are feeling good eno....I mean better! LOL!heh,heh, P.S. laughter during sex is not good for male ego. ~Gee.

Writing wasn't what I had in mind.....LOL We so rarely have the house to ourselves, that it is difficult for us to get together for any real fun. And I ain't talkin' about laughin'. LOL Your poem got me in the mood for sure. ~ Gee.

WE did rock last night! I think the biggest smile on my face. No offense taken, and glad to put another smile on a face too! LOL ! Hugz right back! ~ Gee.

Hey! I'm a beginner at poetry. I joined this site to learn to write poetry. So, as a layman, who doesn't know a damn thing about poetry, I thought this poem was awsome!! I would definitely read all poems by you. And, when it's late at night and I'm alone with the lights dim..................! You said it all, we're ALL greedy when it comes to sex!

only dare to dream. At least those that cannot formulate the thoughts and articulate them as well as you have! Brilliant write my friend! Boni

I have little time right now, just wanted to say: Congrats! Spotlight and evolution! Hugs, ~Nina

Well, all I can say is I'm tired of mental masturbation. lol. It's all in my head.. and nothing in my hands, so to speak. But then again I should be critiquing your poem and not my sex life (or lack of it). Congrats on spotlight, your poem luxuriates.... ~A "Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." T. S. Eliot

With all of my heart... Oh my goodness. That was amazing. I love how the stanzas are short and to the point, not flowly, it really adds a punch there. And I love rhyming... (one of my guilty pleasures...one of many...) The theme wasn't too bad either.... Great poem. ~Sarah Jayne

I've beeen a little under the weather my self these days. A little depressed, so didn't catch the fact you had the spotlight! I can thinkof no one more deserving than you. You do deserve it! This one is a measure of what it takes. I have read it again and again, and it still gives me the pleasure that it did the first time. Congrats again! I finished another Jason and Grandpa poem last night, but am waiting for Jason to come home from his visit to maternal grandma's so I can get his final approval before posting. Maybe tonight. L & Hugz, Gee.

that's so much better than the original. It's like that fantastic long hot night of hot sex with someone you've been in a whirl about and it just feels like it can go all night, and it does and then you lie back and enjoy that "ciggy after sex" even when you don't smoke!! God the earth moved for me too! If I could I would give you 50 gold stars! :0fleur