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soul destroyer

                     harsh words and glares of hatred,like daggers through my heart
                    one minute gentle and loving, lifting my spirit up out of the darkness
                    only to once again crush my very happiness to everlasting darkness
                    i need you like trees need the sun, like plants need water
                    my soul withers without ur touch without the love in your eyes
                    Driving me mad with your cruelity your indifference to my pain
                    then turning around and showering me with remorse  oh God
                    I cant take it please my nemisis spare my soul you have the power
                    To save it, do you want to do you care i cant tell but  my odium
                    my nemisis and my odium my pain my personal hell i cant
                    live without you my soul will perish some may call me weak
                    fuck them i say they dont know my heart they cant even begin to
                    understand, without you i dwell in eternal darkness in a never ending
                     thunderstorm filled with black clouds and deadly lighting
                     i am your captive you hold me in your clutches your words
                    are my shackles your hatered my bars, your angry eyes my lock
                     oh once i thrived in the sunlight, once i danced in the glory of morning
                    now im cursed into rot in saddness in suffering you have destroyed my soul
                    
                      
                
 

— greeneyes, Jul 09, 2009

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Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 10 months ago

Green Eyes

You ask too much of the reader with the way this is delivered. If you restructured this piece to show your stops, your pauses, it may would draw more to read it. Maybe some punctuation would help... Left alignment works the best for visual effects here. Richard