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it's good to see that you're back! I like the concept of this poem, to describe the seasons and fashion them into a symbol for life itself. I have a few suggestions to make it flow better: [ ]parts that could be taken out ( )added or changed something here (Those) Happy thoughts and Happy Days Of flower filled fields and summer haze [It] leave[s] me smiling as if I’m dumb To walk or run there in the sun (On) autumn day(s) twix(t) [the] sun and snow We [will] kick up [the] leaves as on we go A freedom [that] we have now just found Dried leaves and thoughts of rainbow sounds (From our) days for us in our years Gone are the teardrops and the fears As winter (draws near,) soon (to) come [An] imaginary snowm(e)n built for someone (this line is still off) Take on this journey you with me Or [as I say] maybe both separately With contacts that will shake your tum For on we [now] go in love and fun I like the imaginary snowman, it's a great image, but the line is much too long, don't know how to fix it without throwing out your beautiful snowman... Yours, ~Nina

Ink Dragon really put alot of thought into this and I agree with her changes. I like the concept of the poem and smiled as I read it. Always, Cat p.s. Changing my vote to five stars on this marvelous piece!

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at parts I was like "uh.. wha?" but I got the love & the change. I'm still pretty young & my longest relationship was about 4 months.. your poem made me wonder what it would be like to have someone there with you through each season, having snowball fights with, to watch the trees coming back to life with.. all that jazz. to see all that change yet have that one constant in your life (the relationship would probably change too..) oh! I just got it. it's like, when it snows, we lose things but when spring comes around, it's found again.. which reminds me, the guy, the 4 month guy, we had broken up the previous winter.. but we'd gotten back together just when the snow was melting.. strange. it's like we'd suddenly found each other again.. or maybe we just finally felt like looking without all the snow in the way.. kudos, yenti.. look at how long my comment is.. sorry it's not much of a critique or whatever. but I think it says a lot about your poem, making me get all reflective and.. junk. :)

here are your stars... Glad to see you have been working on the snowman line. Yours, ~Nina

Ian ... Lovely to see you back have missed reading you , wont leave a long comment tonight am very tired so I apologise for my slackness lol Love Jayne x

I am not good enough to rate the poem, so I leave it to the more qualified ones. But I must say that your writing style touches my heart. It was a pleasure to read the continuation of love through time and seasons. Regards Samaira.