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The Other World

For time past has there been a tale
of a world you cannot see,

the hairs on your neck
would stand up erect,
for the things that simply cannot be.

Truth be told in this tale of old
your shudders will not wait,

best not scream
it might be a dream,
one mustn't challenge fate.

Whenever you're feeling something weird
don't breathe life into the fear balloon,

your engagement ends
with a few stray friends,
one's bound to react  too soon.

Scurry not to a comfort corner
burrow not yourself away,

one should worry instead
of everything that one's said,
paranoia could be your only betray.

Both worlds spin on together
it's best to let them both be,

with all we have to give
we must live and let live,
one can't deal with what one can't see.













— docmaverick, Jul 08, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Doc,

your theme is great, I love the notion of two worlds colliding or rather overlapping here. The only problem I have with this piece is that it seems overspaced to me. Do you think you could rearrange it? Yours, ~Nina
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 10 months ago

Well Nina....

...I did as you suggested, as far as rearranging the stanzas.....you likee? I think you were right, it needed some "confinement"...if you will. Thanx for your comment, it was helpful. "Write On"! sincerely, #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Well, Doc,

me likeee! Yours, ~Nina P.S. I have decided to stop rating since the new trial should be up soon. I'll revisit all poems once the trial is implemented.