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Nordic cloud
Nordic cloud
Jul 08, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

My Shard

 My Shard


All nature throws its eyes at me 

straight to the quick, 

the heart of me

the arrow of perception shot 

with bowers of flowers 

she does awake my sleeping hours 

I partake of her

so happily

 

I take my card

the shard of rock

that you picked out for me

what does it tell

what does it tell

does it tell more about me

can you guess what comes next

or shall I go on without thee



— Nordic cloud, Jul 08, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

17 years ago

Mystery and Beauty...

Like a mesmerizing chant... Your words weave a Rune, in a Poem. I love it! Raven
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years ago

What Captivated

me the most were these lines, as I think they were the most powerful: All nature throws its eyes at me straight to the quick, the heart of me This poem of uncertainty really caught my attention. Always, Cat
Geezer

Geezer

17 years ago

I'll follow you...

I'll follow you O'Queen, You lead so well. Just thought that the word 'determine' seems a little out of place for some reason. I thought maybe you could say;" Do you know what comes next?" Seems to stay with the language better. Yours always, Sir Gee.
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bjp

17 years ago

Dear Margaret Ann,

It is so you! Including the provocative part, which you normally keep tucked under some chocolaty drizzle of words. Now you are here, ready for eyes to see you and consider the sweetness of provocation. You are of our company and we shall walk with you through forests green and fields yellow bending stalk upon an August breeze. Brian
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Ink Dragon

17 years ago

Ann,

loved this observant (self-observant?) little piece. However, I have to second Sir Gee on the placement of "determine" here... how about "guess" or "foresee"? Yours, ~Nina
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Ann

Everyone said it so eloquently before me but this little write , I am in awe of, I often read your work but dont comment not feeling good enough to comment with any great worth , but I have read this so many times I thought I should finally leave a comment and say I was here :) love and respect Jayne x x

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