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OLDER HANDS

OLDER HANDS

His fingers
Slightly curled
Testifying  !
The tight grip
For happiness
Impossible
To hold

His hands
Wrinkled
Lines  of aging
His left hand
Mover than his right

I don’t remember
Were we met
I walked asleep
Thinking unconscionable
Questions ?
Of my rope
Griping my life

In what church  ?
Who’s store ?
Was it a street corner
Drinking vodka ,  at a bar

When he said ?
Please excuse me
I will be out of your way
One , moment please ?
My mind is sharp 
But my grip
Is less  , than it could be

My thinking , walking at sleep
He is called ?

Politely , a old man
Move out of my way
Another old  dad
Pops  , profiled


In his reply ?
First
I know you
Second , how is your dad
I was the one who loaned
Your family the money
I cosigned for your life


— press, Jul 08, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

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yenti

yenti

16 years 10 months ago

Press

Hi have been out of touch with Neo for a few weeks as there are pressing matters to sort out here in the family so have less time to check poems and My Friends here on site. Now to this piece it needs a little sorting in that some of the words are not spelt correctly, near as bad as my spelling LOL, and some of the lines are a little out so I will ask you to just give this one a tweek and edit, then to resubmit it to the stream, your theme seems to be great so I hope to see this one shine a little more, Yours Ian.T eg:- Mover than his right I walked asleep Thinking unconscionable Of my rope Griping my life Second , how is your dad I was the one who loaned Your family the money I cosigned for your life