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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Jul 06, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

THE SPACE OF EMPTINESS

THE SPACE OF EMPTINESS
 
The emptiness of space...
 the distances between planets and stars:
women are from Venus, men from Mars
all a set jargon, a given decoy
our hearts to confuse -
our minds to deploy

In between astronomical objects
is lots and lots of space,
 silky, sullen, inky-dinky space,
plenty of nothing, nulls within voids.
 
Just as in the dominion of the lover -
the interior of the broken heart 
is composed almost entirely of empty space,
so  too is the kingdom of the heavens.
                            Nature  it seems  adores a vacuum.

BjR  July 6, '09

— Bonitaj, Jul 06, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Bonita,

another clever write! Again, I see a few possible variations: That empty space between planets and stars: women are from Venus, men from Mars all a set jargon, a given decoy our hearts to confuse, our minds to deploy In between astronomical objects lie lots and lots of space, silky, sullen, inky-dinky space, plenty of nothing, nulls within voids. Just as the dominion of the lover, the interior of the broken heart holds almost nothing but empty space, as does the kingdom of the heavens. Nature, it seems, adores a vacuum. Let me know what you think of those suggestions. Yours, ~Nina
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

I THINK I LIKE IT!

Thanks Nina! So glad you stopped by as I posted this 24hrs ago and this is the first I hear from anyone! Shall "ring some changes" here the minute I have time. Busy finishing off for my next post in about 30mins. Not sure of the title just yet... BLOOD, SWEAT & TEARS - perhaps., Please crit it! I think it's a beauty but then I'm biased! :) Cheers Boni
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Boni,

I will certainly read and comment on your new piece, but right now, my bed looks much more tempting than another read. Yours, ~Nina