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Jul 06, 2009
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Seventh of July
the seventh of July 2007
saw the darkness of daylight
rise out of the trenches
onto the pages of poetry heaven
almost like flying a kite
with sentence short and sweet
it took me a little while
to warm to this inner light
those little yellow stars
are a joy to receive
shows that I am here
and not living on mars
new friends are found
who show honesty not deceit
I question some critique
which we are always bound
having since come screaming in
to break the silence
from my blocked poetry mind
I'm not leaving here like Flynn
I offer phrase to open praise
of a life in word and rhyme
for this place has opened
my eyes to a big wide maze
saw the darkness of daylight
rise out of the trenches
onto the pages of poetry heaven
almost like flying a kite
with sentence short and sweet
it took me a little while
to warm to this inner light
those little yellow stars
are a joy to receive
shows that I am here
and not living on mars
new friends are found
who show honesty not deceit
I question some critique
which we are always bound
having since come screaming in
to break the silence
from my blocked poetry mind
I'm not leaving here like Flynn
I offer phrase to open praise
of a life in word and rhyme
for this place has opened
my eyes to a big wide maze
— Fleur MacDonald, Jul 06, 2009
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Critiques
Seren
17 years ago
Fleur your prolific at the
Fleur MacDonald
17 years ago
No wucking furries
Kailashana
17 years ago
Congratulations….that you
Arrow
17 years ago
I enjoyed this uncluttered, frank poem.
Fleur MacDonald
17 years ago
The Darkness of Daylight
Nordic cloud
16 years 4 months ago
Poetry heaven
Fleur MacDonald
16 years 4 months ago
I'm sure I will remember your birthday,
Nordic cloud
16 years 4 months ago
the air it would disintegrate like a forgotten myth.
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