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Sign my cast

but give me something I can taste
make me lick the lollipop residue
that hasn't formed

force me to duck and cower
from the power in your words

caress me with your pen
and make me like it

invade my backbone
and melt me
to the chair

allow the release
and be the cause
give me something real
— themoonman, Jul 06, 2009

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

wow! Is it a full moon?

There is some great poetry being posted tonight. Instead of getting cranky and wondering how to tell people their work is crap, I am running out of superlatives to decribe wondrous works. Thanks for this Richard, you make me better. Cheers, Jess
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Jess...

glad I could add to your already good night... Richard
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Richard,

great poem. Especially loved "lollipop residue" and stanza 3. Yours, ~Nina P.S. a "t" has flown away from l.3
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Nina...

thanks my friend... I just wrote this one yesterday, and that "t" is back... lol... I am such a dummy typist sometimes... Richard
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Jayne...

you speechless, that is high praise indeed... cause I've been in your chat room and seen how you keep the ball going with your on the spot wit... thanks so much, hope all is well enough for your gentle spirit... Richard
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Bert Lamrick

16 years 11 months ago

Well done, Richard

everything fits and rings true. This is an exceptional piece, my friend. Thank you. ~Rick
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Rick...

thanks man, so glad you liked it! Richard
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

16 years 11 months ago

Richard

I always feel great when I read something that (as Rett would say) bitch-slaps my soul. I silently cheered for you while reading this, as I agree with your words, totally. I especially loved your 'invading the backbone' stanza, as it was quite powerful. Well done, friend. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Why worry? There should be laughter after pain. There should be sunshine after rain. These things have always been the same. So why worry now?" - Dire Straits
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Jess...

your silent cheer was very uplifting for me, caused that wiggle in my backbone... Richard
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leonard daranjo

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Richard

I really enjoyed this. It is different. The lines which got to me are: invade my backbone and melt me to the chair Your friend ... Leonard
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Leonard...

glad you liked it, it is different though, much of what I write as of late is un-postable material... thanks Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

(((((((Richard))))))))You

(((((((Richard)))))))) You took the works right out of my mouth. ;-) Ok. What a poem! Esp. those lines that Leonard likes to "invade my backbone and melt me to the chair." Damn! It's good. Damn! It's real. ~A "It is unwise to be too sure of one's own wisdom. It is healthy to be reminded that the strongest might weaken and the wisest might err." Mahatma Gandhi
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Anna...

there you are shining for me... glowing now as sparks fly from the keys your weathered man on the moon
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Richard

Talk about power in words! These are my favorite lines: caress me with your pen and make me like it And the last stanza neatly puts the capper on this marvelous piece. (consider your cast signed, you wonderful man and poet!) Always, Cat
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

thank you Cat...

glad you came in to sign my cast smiling so big now I'm sure I look like smilin Bob on the enhancement commercials...lol thanks Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Richard, you inspired this

Richard, you inspired this poem from me. I may post it to the forum when time allows; thank you for the raw power of your words, your nakedness. let me be a butterfly follow me with your eye let me touch your fingertips sip your rose-red lips your nakedness let me be a hummingbird darting across this page, follow me into the heart-cave of desire, unable to quench the moon let us be gods tonight, let us surf the sky, drown in the sea of madness. ~A~ "It is unwise to be too sure of one's own wisdom. It is healthy to be reminded that the strongest might weaken and the wisest might err." Mahatma Gandhi
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Damn...

how did you know I was naked???? lol... Anna, I am honored that you put this beautiful poem here and said I inspired it... there really is no higher praise for a poet, even when the dirty little human is me... you are a gem among the sand and stone a light for the world to see but I selfishly wrap in its warmth Richard
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 11 months ago

Sign my cast

Go Moon!!Wowee~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
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bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Richard,

I do like this poem. It is lugubrious, like a slow rye with the hint of thigh. You are writing so well. Your images are bounding up the incline. These were my favourites: the whole poem. And you have done something unusual by incorporating the title into the content of the poem, without repeating it as the first line. That is cool, to use the language of our youth (funny how that word has survived the generational spring cleanings of vocabulary). Brian
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Cool...

I've thought the same thing about that word... my seventeen year old son uses the word a lot with his friends, and I still do on occasion as well... bounding up the incline... sounds like a great line for a poem! thanks Brian Richard
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orgami

16 years 11 months ago

"duck and cower"

reminds me of U Tube films instructional clips made for Post World War Two during the cold war "Duck and Cover" went right along with "melt me to my chair" some fantastic poetic writing Richard thank you
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Steven...

glad you stopped in and read this one, the duck and cower does take one back to times when the practice for a nuclear invasion was to get under the desk at school... crazy times. glad you liked it Orgami... Richard
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bloke

16 years 11 months ago

whilst melted to a chair..

To the chair. Oddly those three words made the poem for me. Loved the read as always mr moonman. cheers, brent
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 11 months ago

Wow Richard

I am afraid this one is going to make me gush. I like your work because it makes me go back and read two, three, four, etc. times---and I can understand it---and it usually makes me think. No wonder you already have so many comments. The poem had 'goodness' in each line (you can sign your own cast and lick the lollipop residue), but to pick one, I choose: 'invade my backbone and melt me to the chair' How very unusual those words were. Awesome. Yours, Deelilah
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Dee...

well you gush all you want to here, I am glad you are here and able to discern my ol crazy writing... thanks Richard
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Kelsey...

I'm glad you liked the lollipop line, I thought it was a bit long, it was longer but I cut it down as much as I could... The title, thank you for being your sweet honest self... it may've been a little reaching, but I'll try to explain, to me it was an added play on the words delivered, sign my cast, imprint me, give me something I can walk around with, something I can't wipe off, give me something real, all without saying it, I guess it was a bit of a reach. Melt... you are right, there are many words that would fit there with a sharper tone, but I like the "melt" there for its simplicity of imaging... thanks so much Kelsey, you are taking a much deeper look and it is appreciated... and personally, I like being questioned about word choices and titles, makes me have to think about why I choose what I do... and that is what this place is all about. thank you! Richard
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 9 months ago

Melt me....

Melt me to my chair and make me toast! I'm sure these words have different meaning for you, but they are favorite lines around here. They are spouted when we are toasted and feeling right with the world. Nice! Gee.
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Simplicity

I love the simplicity of this poem and yet executed with such precision. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Moonman

You have a beautiful wit about you, and clever, well any way, where do I sign again? I enjoyed your poem. Keep em comin. Love Lyz.XX