hardcorechick28

Jul 05, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

DeMona

She who stalks the night
Embraces the darkness
Emerging from her wooden bed

Black leather on lace
Upon milk white skin
Stiletto boots hit the floor

Flaming hair
Eyes, a frosty blue
The public stops and stares
But they don't have a clue

She is DeMona
Mistress of Seduction
Dominatrix Divine
Making men out of boys
Making grown men cry

— hardcorechick28, Jul 05, 2009

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Seren

16 years 11 months ago

WTF ??????

Ok wtf I just read this poem under Geezers Name whos poem is it its the exact same poem under different names ????????????????

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

its mine

I accidently put it under his name....not paying attention that when i signed in, he was still logged in...LOL. that's what happens when you arent totally awake...LOL.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

OH well read Gees comment

OH well read Gees comment but yeah its a really good poem I was baffled I didnt know what the hell was going on LOL get Gee to put another poem in its place or blank it all out LOL god you had my head spinning LOL Love Jayne x x

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

glad we figured it out....

LOL... i am glad we got it all straightened out. Sometimes I am so oblivious and need to pay more attention. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

OHHHHHH

And I meant to mention the missing [of] on this poem and in my confusion forgot but i cant see that Cat picked up the ball LOL take care and this was a really great poem ... you had me so confused I couldnt work out how two poems identical even to the missing [of] could get under two different names LMAO I have to say I laughed when you told me its something I would do I am very forgetful sometimes LOL love Jayne x

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Vampyress!

An excellent write. One question: did you mean for it to read... making men out "of" boys? Always, Cat

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

thank you

Thank you for catching my mistake!!! Sometimes I type too fast and miss a word here or there. Thanks again!!!

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 11 months ago

Hey it's DeMona!!!!

Haha hey Carrie, great to see the poem about your muse. I'm with Cat though on that line...otherwise nicely done. "Black leather on lace.." great imagery in describing her, I really like the two verses you dedicated to describing her, makes her seem so real. Well done and keep writing! Peace n Love Katie

infinite_dwarf

16 years 11 months ago

Well all right, Carrie!!

Nice to see your muse running rampant. Definitely not someone I'd want to piss off... LOL! ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Why worry? There should be laughter after pain. There should be sunshine after rain. These things have always been the same. So why worry now?" - Dire Straits

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

I too thought......

I too, thought that Carries work was superb. She is a fine up-coming poetess. I am glad to have her close so that we can share ideas and time. We have great fun in discussing the site and where it takes us. She may not get to put that[of]in for awhile, but she will get to it I'm sure. She has a lot on her plate, with her son and all. I am glad to let her share my station when she needs to, and that is what led to the mix-up in posting. I hadn't logged off, and this dummy computer doesn't know her fingers from mine.~Gee.

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

thank you.....

Thank you for your words of encouragement. I too enjoy our conversations concerning poetry and the site and look forward to them every weekend. Again, I apologize for not paying attention to who's account I was on this morning. That's what happens when I am up half the night...LOL. I appreciate you allowing me to share your station, as well as your home. I will talk to ya later.....

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

thank you all

Thank you all for your comments. I made the revision. Sometimes I type so fast that I miss a word and am glad you caught my mistake for me. Your words of praise and criticism is always appreciated. I am always striving to improve myself as well as my writing. So thank you all very much. If you read the ones on my blog, those are the next 2 in the DeMona saga. There will be more to follow as I plan on having a series dedicated to my alter ego.

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

I like DeMona

And so does min. She has offered her a lift any time she needs dragonflight. Cheers, Jess

hardcorechick28

16 years 11 months ago

thanks

Thank you Jess!! Glad DeMona is such a hit!! I hope you like the other ones to follow.