Seren

Jul 05, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Madness Strings Love

A lone violin
cried through time
this sadness wept
by strings divine

Sorrowed in madness
stringed to maid fair
his pain of love
lost to deep cares

Vision of beauty
her hair alight
shining a beacon
splendid to sight

Lost in his love
failure to see
pining for him
most passionately

Angels guardian
observe from above
tears drop to hope
grace rains of love

— Seren, Jul 05, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

I love

poems that mention music and I can't find anything wrong with this work. It is beautiful and sensitive!! Just lovely ")fleur

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

I love music and when I can combine the two ? its when I find I write at my happiest and at my ease,it just flows and this was was pure flow no edit and thats how I think it might stay for this one appeals even to me and I dont often like my poems LOL ... this one has a sad undertone but I hope leaves a grace of hope .. Love Jayne x

Pen Name

16 years 11 months ago

Seren

I loved the Ballad. I found the painful sweetness of un-returned loved expressed well by your violin. Respectfully, Pen-Name

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Pen-Name

Thanks so much for the read I am really letting the pen flow for me lately and I am taking violin lessons shortly, being a music teacher I have violin concertos running through my head yet to be learnt,so it sometimes spills into my poetry .. Love Jayne x

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

If Music Be The Food Of Love...

Play on... I am always impressed by your rhyming skills and the way you do it so effortlessly! The sorrow in this poem is bittersweet in the unrequited love department. A time old theme given uniqueness by your own one-of-a-kind special touch! Love it! Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Cat

Love flows all around lately, and loss of love and people getting married ,it must be the season for it though my love life is dandy a couple of friends and their stories inspired this one just flew out and I even like it LOL ... Your the one-of-a-kind specialness weaving her magic round here as it should be :), your graceful self always puts a big smile on my face ... Love and (hugz) Jayne x x

Bonitaj

16 years 11 months ago

May your wellspring

Never run dry! Dear Jayne! You are writing so beautifully and lyrically at present! Long may it last! good write Boni

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Boni ...

I dont know where it comes from sometimes it can be the smallest thing that triggers one of these flowing writes for thats how they come out its the only way I can describe it .. Much Love Jayne x

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Getting sleep important

For tonight have to take nap, so I can do 12 hr. shift. Have to go but will be back tomorrow, to work and commenting.L to all,Gee.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Gee

Hope you had a good sleep before work hun will catch you round ... much Love Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Sorry..

Sorry I didn't get back to you right away, I have been distracted by some other concerns. Yeah, I was under the weather a little bit. Not enough sleep and so many things on my mind. Also in the process of trying to get motorcycle up and running. Money is very tight and not much to spare for that. Anyways, I loved your poem, and your rhyming. As you know, I am a great proponet of rhyming. I love your skill! I couldn't find anything to criticize. ~Gee.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Gee

Thank you , I understand when people dont have time,I used to work I remember what that was like, glad you liked this one its a favourite of mine as well I cant find anything wrong with it but I am sure when i edit it something will come up it always does lol (hugz) hope you are getting some sleep and find a little peace my friend Tc ... much Love Jayne x Also for taking the time out when your obviously very tired I really do appreciate it my friend ...(((((hugz))))

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

I did get some sleep

I did get some sleep, and then went to Tink's and joined Chat. I love your poem and really couldn't find anything to criticize about it! I return your [[[[hugs]]]] and will go see if I can do some work on the Jason and Grandpa series. L ~ Gee.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Awww I am glad you got time to chat

I haven't had enough time to chat lately what with everything going on LOL ... cant wait to read the next in the grandpa series ... will have time the next couple of days to catch up with all of them ... Take care much love Jayne x

barbsdad2003

16 years 11 months ago

Delighted ...

to see such spareness (of words) here. Lends extra richness. Flows smooth. Easy read. Yet stimulates brain to spark in unexplainable ways. I'm seeing marked improvements in your writing. Not only is that wonderful in its own right; it encourages me ... Thanx, Chuck

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Chuck

there are a few of these that I wrote in a kind of flowing freeform ... I am so glad you liked them I am still learning but I have been encouraged to experiment,I am so happy you liked this one havent been well the last few days but I am picking up slowly Hope you well (hugz) love Jayne x x

Rett

16 years 11 months ago

Short and sweet here

and short and sweet reply. Beautiful. Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Thank you Rett

I often write beauty in my poetry to help with bad days and I am sure you understand , these writes usually are when I am down so I try to create a little magic for myself to cheer up ... Thank you for the read Love Jayne x x