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Upon this Marble Ball

Gazing from the star's upon this marble ball,
the answer is always being sought,
that understanding maybe can be bought,
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In the darkness of my mind
the shadows block the light,
but what will be seen
when there isn't any insight,

Distant is the knowledge
that seems so close at hand,
searching in a sandbox
for a single grain of sand,

Thought's of thoughts
dancing through my head,
even for a scholar
it's impossible to be read,

Knowledge and understanding
are attempting to be wed,
but does it really happen
before I'm surely dead,

The question of existence,
scare's me with it's chill,
do I really want to know
for who will pay that bill,

The answer I have sought
Personally and to some degree,
is what I always thought,
but some may not agree,

That I am but a speck
upon this Marble Ball.
— Eduardo Cruz, Jul 04, 2009

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Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

Yup!

We are all just specks upon this marble ball. I agree with the whole concept and think that it was adroitly expressed. Love the last line and the title, too. Keep 'em comming! Always, Cat
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Cat,

I am so happy you enjoyed it, and agreed! Thank you for the vote of confidence! thanks, Eddie
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Eddie...

we are indeed but a speck... I enjoyed your poem and its conclusion immensely... I did feel the over-use of commas was distracting and felt many, if not all, were unneeded... for the most part, the line breaks cause the pauses... in your first line... Gazing from "up" high, upon this marble ball,... the "up" I felt to be redundant and thought it would read much better without it and the break, like this... Gazing from high upon this marble ball from there I thought some of the sentences could be cut down a bit, but wouldn't want to hurt the meaning you were conveying as I thought it very good... but I leave that thought with you... well done Eddie... good to see you here! Richard
Eduardo Cruz

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 11 months ago

Hey Richard!

yes the "up" and the "High" seem redundant, but I wanted to convey someone Like a cherub or a God looking down upon the earth and thinking that humans think that understanding can be bought. The following stanza's, are by a human who over time has come to that realization. That it can't be bought that it comes from trial an error. If you still don't agree with what I was attempting to do in the first stanza, then please show me a better way to express it. I do value your opinion teacher. always listening, Eddie PS. I made changes after I read it in your prospective!!!