Equitable Angst

This hit with the force of a rock to the head,is there anything you cant write my sweet friend?, you have so hit on the problems that young men today, face (of NOT being seen) some of them turn to crime just so a world can see them .... Your title hits the mark and the poem speaks of a young man in turmoil in todays world ... an awesome poem my friend (hugz) five if ever there was one ... As a mother of three boys we have already faced this problem with one of my sons ... Thank goodness I pay attention for it was a problem that would have spiraled out of control very easily ... You have eyes that can see into the world ... much Love Jayne x x

finally, I get round to reading this piece of yours. Your title request is easily answered: It was because of the title that I wanted to read this. Your poem touches a nerve with me, as I do have my problems with the equitism (if that is not a word, it is now) of our modern world. People do not only go unnoticed but they are expected to be just the same as everybody else, and the concept of diversity of opinion and interest is fast dying out. All men (and women) are equal in that they crave uniqueness, I think, but they are not brought up to be unique, they are brought up to fit in with the crowd. Oh, I keep getting carried away today in my comments...Anyhow, awesome poem! Yours, ~Nina P.S. l.1 spiralling?

Had to laugh at Nina's "if it isn't a word, it is now" as I've used that line often myself... LOL! You bring about the struggles of a youngster trying to make it in the world. The whole mentality of "oh (s)he's just a kid, what problems do they face that justify being so worried/depressed/angry about?" Kids have stresses, too, as well as fears and other problems. They should be embraced and remedied... not swept under the carpet and taken lightly. Good writing. Seems as though you had no problems with this title! It was really good - drew me in, and kept me put. ~Jess K. ----------------------- "Why worry? There should be laughter after pain. There should be sunshine after rain. These things have always been the same. So why worry now?" - Dire Straits

well written poem and thought out well I Love your title see and hear about troubles its all over i always said kids were invisible until they could vote and pay taxes Basically when you need something from them and my dad said "Son dont worry about getting a job until your eighteen and then you'll be working from then on anyway" but like all I had troubles too so I remember I try to listen But this poem is good I love your punctuation Cat it really adds and as I say the title is so appropriate for this peice

Beautifully written... The world is an unfair place. Respectfully, Pen Name

Very nice Cat....i like how it flows....reminds me of someone i know....

i enjoyed this poem very much and i agree with kelsey :)

The piece had a very nice flow to it due to well chosen words. It seems to encapsulate the angst of youth yearning to be taken seriously and by that it could mean to merely be 'seen'.