"Twilight"!

Dancing towards Twilight,
what will she bring?
Stories of sadness and woe?

Come Winter, Summer, Fall,
or late Spring;
Twilight is never your foe.

She can sweep around you
a breath of fresh air,
she means to surprise you, for sure;

for she can assist you
in burying a "care",
so tomorrow, you'd better endure.

Don't be embarrassed
to dance with Twilight
she means not to toy with you,

she can help you focus
just lend her your sight,
and then dance to the tune that is true.

— docmaverick, Jul 03, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

docmaverick

16 years 11 months ago

I'll come up with a better word that'll fit....

...and keep the continuity intact. Thanks so much for the kind review, it was greatly appreciated. The reason the title is in quotes, is because it's a woman's nickname. "Write On"! #{:>{)}@==== docmaverick.

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

love it

Oh man, I give you hell sometimes (and I know you love it, teehee) but this delightful piece makes it all worth while. One small tech thing- so tomorrow, you’ll better endure. so tomorrow, you’d better endure. Cheers, Jess

docmaverick

16 years 11 months ago

It just so happens....

...that you're correct. "You'd" DOES work a bit better than, "You'll". Thanx elf, for spending your time contemplating this piece. As always, I greatly appreciate your excellent feedback. Yours is a comment that not only sets the course....but also, accentuates the tempo, questions the internal logic, and absolutely stifles the ego so that one may receive the truth....concerning an effort. Really, elf...thanx for your time. As you can still see, I'm still trying to "stretch out"; concerning my writing. At any rate, #{:>{)}@==== "Write On"! docmaverick.