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MY LOVER

MY LOVER

When she calls
Her breath
Is like
Oxygen resuscitating
Colors
Of blues
To colors of love

One kiss
 I ask
A hundred years
One kiss
Will last

Her head
Her toe
Time will become

A movement
Of lovers
Combining
Time blended 
With  love

This time
This blending
Of love

Changes into
Passion
Directing sound
Are the
Words  evolveing
A body thereof

Our body movements
Evolve

In rhythms
That is faster
That is slow
A melody
Of deeper
My lover
Don’t let go

I love her
More than
Others can see
I will unwrap her
Kissing each
Layer
As a gilt
To me
— press, Jul 03, 2009

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weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 11 months ago

Nice.

But you don't read much poetry, do you Press. Cheers, Jess
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

This is how it's done Weird......

Nice Press, but I think it would read better if you used some punctuation. I was a little lost when you said: In rhythyms that is faster that is slow. [BTW] you left off the ? Weird. Gee.
press

press

16 years 11 months ago

Hey guys smile

I love you guys , But can I have my poem back now ? if you guys are finish [ laugh] Press